[projectaon] Re: Grand Master comment period [Books 15-20]
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Thu, 12 Apr 2012 11:24:41 +0100
On 10/04/2012 00:15, Jonathan Blake wrote:
On Fri, Apr 6, 2012 at 4:19 PM, Jonathan Blake<jonathan@xxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
I'll work on putting together
some diffs for the GM books soon.
Done.
http://projectaon.org/staff/jonathan/diffs/
Right, here's what I noticed--much reduced from previous trawls. Many of
these were spotted when running the less-simple editions through a
spelling/grammar check in MS-Word. Despite the HORRIBLE amount of
false-positives--and the number of times it wants to take something
correct and make it wrong!--it has proved quite useful for flagging up
potential issues.
BOOKS 1-28
(ne) Illustration Captions: [so: In some books the longer captions are
broken up using <line> tags; in others they are not. Let's decide which
is better and standardise.]
BOOKS 13-20:
(er) The Story So Far: to destroy the fertile world of Magnamund have
themselves -> to destroy the fertile world of Magnamund, have themselves
(er) Grand Master Disciplines: Duration, and the protection of his
inanimate body, increase as -> Duration and the protection of his
inanimate body increase as
BOOK 14:
(er) 140: this spear -> this Spear
BOOK 15:
(ne) 75: Sceptre) : [so: Delete superfluous space between "Sceptre)" and
"</enemy>" in the xml.]
(er) 163: what's wrong! -> what's wrong?
(er) 177: Follow me, I know -> Follow me; I know
(ne) Errata: Replaced and -> Replaced
BOOK 16:
(er) 137: A long procession of acolytes are filing into the hall -> A
long procession of acolytes is filing into the hall [so: Maybe, possibly?]
(er) 238: close by the River Storn, a few days -> close by the River
Storn a few days
BOOK 17:
(er) 137: and Spear -> or Spear
(er) 180: then turn to -> turn to
(er) 182: starboard and in a terrifying instant, you -> starboard and,
in a terrifying instant, you [so: cf. Sections 72, 168, 173, etc.]
(ne) Errata: (Sun Thane is the highest possible rank) -> as Sun Thane is
the highest rank it is possible to have attained in this book [so: Or
something similar.]
BOOK 18:
(er) 271: The bridge, and the surrounding banks of the river, are -> The
bridge and the surrounding banks of the river are
(ne) Errata: (33) Replaced '‘or less '’ with ‘'or less,'’. -> (33)
Replaced '‘or less <!--link-text-->turn’' with '‘or less,
<!--link-text-->turn’'. [so: The trailing space was there because I
didn't originally know how to get checkerrata.pl to work properly with
<link-text> elements! >_< ]
BOOK 19:
(er) Improved Disciplines: The degree of damage so caused, and the
resultant drain upon a Grand Crown’s reserves of ENDURANCE, are
dependent -> The degree of damage so caused and the resultant drain upon
a Grand Crown’s reserves of ENDURANCE are dependent [so: Also (ne) in
Book 20.]
(??) 6, 62, 220, 257, 312, 338: If you possess a Bow, and the Discipline
of Magi-magic and have attained the rank of Kai Grand Guardian -> If you
possess a Bow and the Discipline of Magi-magic, and have attained the
rank of Kai Grand Guardian
(er) 27: other traps here, and there -> other traps here and there
(er) 37: sword, axe, or dagger -> Sword, Axe, or Dagger
(er) 129: click!, and -> click! and
(er) 134: this [W]eapon or skill -> this [W]eapon or this skill [so:
weapon -> Weapon is an erratum that has already been implemented here.]
(er) 138: wumph!, the -> wumph! the
(er) 148: that remain -> that remains
(er) 198, 292: and, with a deafening wumph!, it -> and with a deafening
wumph! it
(er) 199: The first thing you see are the creature’'s eyes -> The first
things you see are the creature'’s eyes
BOOK 20:
(er) 4 [Caption]: carpet of maggots squirm -> carpet of maggots squirms
(er) 4: and instantly the carpet of maggots wriggle and squirm towards
-> and instantly the carpet of maggots wriggles and squirms towards
(er) 60: Tormentress’, and it reveals -> Tormentress’. It also reveals
(er) 63: The shrieks of the fliers draws an expectant crowd -> The
shrieks of the fliers draw an expectant crowd
(ne) Errata: Replaced and ‘reptillian’ -> Replaced ‘reptillian’
(ne) Errata: and’.Replaced -> and’. Replaced
--
Simon Osborne
Project Aon
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