On Thu, 23 Aug 2012, Jonathan Blake wrote:
(??) 6, 62, 220, 257, 312, 338: If you possess a Bow, and the Discipline of Magi-magic and have attained the rank of Kai Grand Guardian -> If you possess a Bow and the Discipline of Magi-magic, and have attained the rank of Kai Grand GuardianOriginal (I'm assuming all of these were originally the same): "If you possess a Bow, and the Discipline of Magi-magic, and have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord..." What I've changed it to: "If you possess a Bow, the Discipline of Magi-magic, and have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord..."
This looks awkward to me because of bad parallelism. If you're writing it as a list of 3 things, either a verb needs to introduce each item, or the same verb needs to be applied to all 3 items, but introducing a new verb for the third item doesn't work.
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