On Wed, Aug 29, 2012 at 3:04 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Speaking about commas: > <http://projectaon.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=gotopost&board=helpwanted&thread=706&post=38777> > > (er) 02fotw 49: > Sails tear, ropes mysteriously untie themselves and timbers warp and leak. > The men become short-tempered in the cramped quarters and fighting, often to > the death, is commonplace. > > > The first sentence should have a serial comma before 'and'. [tw] writes: "I > would have written "their cramped quarters". A comma before "and fighting" > might also improve readability." I'm not sure about changing 'the' to > 'their' (the original seems correct to me), but should there be a comma > before 'and fighting' in view of last week's discussion? Agreed on the first sentence. Regarding the second, "the" is fine as-is, and here a couple options for punctuation that I think works: "The men become short-tempered in the cramped quarters, and fighting — often to the death — is commonplace." "The men become short-tempered in the cramped quarters, and fighting, often to the death, is commonplace." I prefer the first option. I would have also suggested parentheses, but Joe rarely seems to use them in these situations, or at least that's my impression. -- Jon ~~~~~~ Manage your subscription at //www.freelists.org/list/projectaon