[projectaon] Re: 21votm errata
- From: Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: Project Aon List <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Tue, 31 Mar 2009 12:47:42 -0700
Last little group of errata.
(er) 306: o'war -> ? o' war [LM] [so: According to Chambers it should
be 'men-o'-war']
men-o'-war
(er) 318: crowd immediately lose -> crowd immediately loses [LM]
Same as 286. OK but I vote for making the change.
(er) 323: of the Khorda towards -> of the Khorda, towards [SD]
No need to make a separation here.
(er) 338: each hand him 1 Gold Crown apiece -> ? each hand him 1 Gold
Crown OR hand him 1 Gold Crown apiece [LM]
Redundant, but OK as-is.
(er) 346: a moment longer, and so you mount -> a moment longer. You
mount [SD: Original text just does not flow well at all]
I vote to change "and, with a flick of your heel, you leave" to
"and--with a flick of your heel--leave". Note the dashes and the
removal of "you".
(er) 350: troop of Vakeros guards rush -> troop of Vakeros guards rushes
[LM]
OK as-is.
Next, to respond to the feedback.
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Jon
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