[projectaon] Re: 21votm errata
- From: Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: Project Aon List <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Fri, 27 Mar 2009 15:19:08 -0700
(er) 208: in lieu of a gold crown -> in lieu of 1 Gold Crown [SD: Game
mechanic]
Or "in lieu of a Gold Crown".
(er) 212: shouts Oswin, and he -> ? shouts Oswin, as he [LM]
This change sounds better, but it's OK as-is.
(er) 217: under way -> underway
Although "underway" seems to be valid as an adjective, the current
usage is OK as-is.
(er) 225: Kai skills -> Magnakai skills
agreed
(er) 227: bottle catches you a glancing blow to the head -> bottle
deals you a glancing blow to the head [SD: "catches" and "glancing"
essentially mean the same thing; i.e. the reader gets the point]
Understood, but OK as-is.
(er) 230: wave of enemy raiders come -> wave of enemy raiders comes [LM]
OK as-is since the riders can be viewed as leaping individually.
(er) 232: You agree his price -> ? You agree to his price (or is this
idiom?) [LM]
agreed
(er) 235: Here await a party -> Here awaits a party [LM]
agreed
(er) 235: bodyguard of King's troopers have -> bodyguard of King's
troopers has [LM]
OK as-is.
(er) 235: escort, having delivered you safely to the quay, now bid ->
escort, having delivered you safely to the quay, now bids [LM]
OK as-is.
(er) 235: and depart -> and departs [LM]
OK as-is.
(er) 245: and cleft chin -> and a cleft chin
OK as-is.
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Jon
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