[projectaon] Re: Comment Period for Lone Wolf 1-7
- From: Jonathan Blake <jonathan.blake@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Fri, 23 Sep 2011 13:30:31 -0700
On Thu, Sep 22, 2011 at 2:01 PM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> On 21/09/2011 01:36, Jonathan Blake wrote:
>>
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/03tcok/title.htm
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-simple/lw/03tcok.htm
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-less-simple/lw/03tcok/title.htm
>
> (er) 26: a Dagger and a Mace: both carved from solid bone. -> a Dagger and a
> Mace. They are both carved and fashioned from whalebone. [so: As per
> Mongoose Publishing edition. Alternatively, alter it to: "a Dagger and a
> Mace, both carved from solid bone." as the use of the colon here is not
> correct.]
I think we should just switch it to a comma. The extra flavor text is
nice, but doesn't solve any problems.
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/04tcod/title.htm
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-simple/lw/04tcod.htm
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-less-simple/lw/04tcod/title.htm
>
> 79: [so: Update the text and erratum so that the text says: "You may take
> {-however-} as many additional Torches _as_ you wish before continuing".]
Agreed.
> 123: [so: Update text and erratum so that the text says: "each one counts as
> _a_ Backpack Item".]
Agreed.
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/06tkot/title.htm
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-simple/lw/06tkot.htm
>> http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-less-simple/lw/06tkot/title.htm
>
> (er) 253: It's going' t'be -> It's going t'be
Agreed.
> (er) 164, 234, 283: Die Northlander -> Die, Northlander [so: Otherwise it
> looks like Roark's sister is saying "The Northlander" in German! ;-) ]
Perhaps a problem only a few readers would have, but agreed. :)
--
Jon
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