[projectaon] Editor's Companion Submission
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From: Jan Charvát <ch.honza@xxxxxxxxxx>
Date: 14:37:27 on Monday, February 1, 2010
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(??) 27v 219: [jc: Change the third and fourth choose. It should be 0: 123
(death), 1-3: 300 (-3 EP), 4-7: 192 (-2 EP), 8 or more: 254 (-1 EP).]
(??) 27v 166: [jc: alter the vertical spacing of the first three rows]
(??) 27v 47: [jc: This is a bit weird. Maybe sort out the chooses ascending:
0-3, 4-8, 9]
(??) 27v 286: slip them on over your tunics -> slip them on over (their) tunics
[jc: or is it grammatically correct?]
(ft) 27v 248: [jc: Should Kai Grandmaster use here 'Sunderer' or 'Andarin
Warhammer' to avoid Kai Weapon CS loss? (sections 46, 122 and 323)]
(er) 27v 103: you should be part -> you should be parted
(??) 27v 220: Magnakai healing skills -> Kai healing skills [jc: Standardize
Kai/Magnakai in this book, in sect. 10, 82, 102, 165, 213, 264, 310 and 321.]
(??) 27v 318: If you have yet to attain this level of Kai rank, -> If you do
not possess this discipline, or have yet to attain this level of Kai rank,
[jc: In section 334, you could use also Grand Pathmanship discipline.]
(??) 27v 318: If you have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord, -> If you possess
Grand Huntmastery, and have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord, [jc: In section
334, you could use also Grand Pathmanship discipline.]
(??) 27v 1: and as his young Toranese crew -> and as skyship's young Toranese
crew [jc: I would use 'his crew' only with Banedon.]
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