[projectaon] Re: Comment period for 1-7
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Tue, 21 Feb 2012 14:41:48 +0000
On 18/02/2012 04:16, Jonathan Blake wrote:
On Fri, Feb 17, 2012 at 6:14 AM, Simon Osborne<outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
Jon, you're really spoiling us! :-D These make it SO much easier to edit.
Thanks!!
I'm glad we've hit on a useful resource. :)
Erm, sorry about this, but I got a bit bored...
I've audited the first seven books again, mostly for Serial Comma usage.
Apologies for the work, but I REALLY want this to be the last time we
have to revisit these books!! >_<
Note that I've also just made a couple of changes to gcbiolw.inc which
will affect the Title Pages for each of Books 1-7.
ALL (ne) Acknowledgements: Ensure usage of following capitalised forms:
Frontmatter (not "frontmatter" or "front matter"); Extramatter;
Mainmatter; Action Charts; Map; etc.
BOOK 1
(ne) Acknowledgements: 141–175 and 246–280 -> 141–175, and 246–280
(er) 57: several bottles of coloured liquids and an embroidered rug ->
several bottles of coloured liquids, and an embroidered rug
(er) 61: blood-smeared and -> blood-smeared, and
(er) 62: west and continue -> west, and continue
(er) 76: your horse and ride -> your horse, and ride
(er) 82: white steed and head -> white steed, and head
(er) 88: [so: should 'pegasus' be capitalised?]
(er) 284 (Caption): not easy, the ground -> not easy; the ground
(er) 291: Spears and a Dagger -> Spears, and a Dagger
(er) 343: grab your weapon and -> grab your weapon, and
(er) 349: your neck and slip -> your neck, and slip
BOOK 2
(er) The Game Rules: ENDURANCE points and Kai Disciplines -> ENDURANCE
points, and Kai Disciplines
(er) 20: Ragadorn bridge -> Ragadorn Bridge [so: Maybe?]
(er) 124: Short Sword and a Dagger -> Short Sword, and a Dagger
(er) 197: your equipment and make -> your equipment, and make
(er) 243: the sails and you -> the sails, and you
(er) 263: port watchtower and hurry -> port watchtower, and hurry
(er) 274: 6 Gold Crowns and a -> 6 Gold Crowns, and a
(er) 301: 3 Daggers and a -> 3 Daggers, and a
(er) 314: a key and make -> a key, and make
(er) 336: tokmor and -> tokmor, and
BOOK 3
(ne) Acknowledgements: Vito Trifilo (sections -> Vito Trifilo (Sections
(er) The Game Rules: ENDURANCE points and Kai Disciplines -> ENDURANCE
points, and Kai Disciplines
(er) Equipment: fur-lined cloak and mittens -> fur-lined cloak, and mittens
(er) 46: two halves and place -> two halves, and place
(er) 47: chamber and investigate -> chamber, and investigate
(er) 85: ice and the constant -> ice, and the constant
(er) 122: herbs and leave -> herbs, and leave
BOOK 4
(ne) Title: patrol. but -> patrol, but
(ne) Acknowledgements: 176-210, -> 176-210, and
(ne) Acknowledgements: 106-175, -> 106-175 and
(er) The Game Rules: ENDURANCE points and Kai Disciplines -> ENDURANCE
points, and Kai Disciplines
(er) 91: remount your horses and -> remount your horses, and
(er) 232, 297: Ruanon bridge -> Ruanon Bridge [so: maybe?]
(er) 281: pounding and your -> pounding, and your
(er) 288: earthfall [so: This is OK, right?]
BOOK 5
(ne) Acknowledgements: sections 1–400 -> Sections 1–400
(er) The Game Rules: ENDURANCE points and Kai Disciplines -> ENDURANCE
points, and Kai Disciplines
(er) 181: the Grand Palace and, somehow, return -> the Grand Palace, and
somehow return
(er) 190: Hammerfist The Armourer -> Hammerfist the Armourer
(er) 287: saddle ring and -> saddle ring, and
(er) 336: wings stiffen and -> wings stiffen, and
BOOK 6:
(ne) Acknowledgements [x2]: sections -> Sections
(ne) Acknowledgements: Tony Wrigley (36–70) -> Tony Wrigley (Sections 36–70)
(er) 8: points) and -> points), and
(er) 82: feed and then -> feed, and then
(er) 126: Tekaro bridge -> Tekaro Bridge [so: maybe?]
(er) 170: chest and try -> chest, and try
(er) 210: saddlebag and offers -> saddlebag, and offers
(er) 263: lapels and hoist -> lapels, and hoist
(er) 291: palm and throws -> palm, and throws
(er) 303: saddle and land -> saddle, and land
BOOK 7:
(ne) Acknowledgements [x4]: sections -> Sections
(ne) Acknowledgements: 246-280 and -> 246-280, and
(ne) Acknowledgements: 211–245 and -> 211–245, and
(er) 339: his sword and -> his sword, and
I'll tidy up the Acknowledgements pages for the other books right now,
as well as looking at the Serial Comma usage for Books 8-28 and GS1-4.
Fun, fun, fun... ;-)
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Simon Osborne
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