[projectaon] Re: 27v comment period
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Sat, 28 Sep 2013 09:18:33 +0100
On 26/09/2013 00:28, Jonathan Blake wrote:
This is what I got from my play-through.
tssf: It just hit me that the order of how the story is told (i.e.
born MS 5063, becomes Grand Master, defends Kai Monastery in MS 5077)
implies that the player became Grand Master at 14-years-old at the
latest. Is this a correct reading, or should we reorder this passage a
bit?
I'm not that bothered by this, but we could amend "In the year MS 5077
you skill and courage" to something like "In the year MS 5077, while
still training to become a Grand Master, you skill and courage".
Would this affect the other NO books as well?
equipment: For the record, I noticed that all of the bow illustration
by Brian Williams for books 9-28 was upside-down (shadowing looked
kind of silly once I noticed it). Corrected in svn repository.
132: head They -> head. They
(ne)
170: the Eye of Lhaz -> an Eye of Lhaz
There seems to be more than one Eye of Lhaz: one from 22tbos section
156 and one from 167.
OK, then remember to add a link to the other section in the errata entry.
272: BEHNAZ—70 miles -> <signpost>BEHNAZ—70 MILES</signpost>
(ne)
I found (and already fixed in xml) a dumb typo in the Errata section.
That's all I spotted in my (admittedly brief) run through.
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