On Sun, Apr 5, 2015 at 12:34 PM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
wrote:
On 04/04/2015 00:17, Jonathan Blake wrote:stares at you in silence; then, begrudgingly, he nods
Right, let's get Slaughter Mountain Run out the door. Over the next
week, ending next Thursday, April 9, please take another look at the
book to see if we've missed anything so far. Report back and we'll try
to get it sorted out.
Hmm. A few more than I'd hoped here.
I've been using "Deleted xxx" in the Errata entries for the books. I
noticed that according to the MoS it should be "Removed xxx" instead. <
http://www.projectaon.org/en/Sanctum/ManualOfStyle> I can fix this across
the books if required.
(er) 1: Cutter stares at you in silence then, begrudgingly, he nods ->
Cutter stares at you in silence, and then, begrudgingly, he nods
In the interest of making a less-intrusive change, I would propose: Cutter
(er) 45: the first of Mad Dog’s men enter the observation room -> theDog's men enter the observation room", which would make the original ok
first of Mad Dog’s men enters the observation room
I think it's acceptable to read the original as "the first [few] of Mad
(er) 85: collapsed long ago, all, that is, except-> collapsed long ago:
all, that is, except [so: Or, collapsed long ago--all, that is, except]
(er) 98: [Is the Signal Flare a Backpack Item (and therefore might cause a
Stealth penalty)? If so we should add "(Add the Signal Flare to your
<link>Action Chart</link>.)" ]
(er) 214: fire then, as the footsteps -> fire. Then, as the footsteps
(er) 328: heavy machine guns and the like -> heavy machine guns, and the"munitions". In the former case, we can leave as-is. In the latter case, we
like [so: does this function like a serial comma use?]
Depends whether we think "and the like" modifies "heavy machine guns" or
