[survived-dfw] Re: Lonely Photographer needs your help!
- From: Andree Kehn <andreekehn@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: survived-dfw@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Tue, 9 Dec 2014 13:32:58 -0500
oh wow, that is a great trick!!
Love the re-write too! Thanks!
I hope you are feeling better! Was it the flu??
On Dec 9, 2014, at 1:18 PM, Damn Fine Words wrote:
> My rework of the copy, for fun:
>
> Curious about whether our photography skills fits into your budget? Wishing
> you could have us snapping shots at your upcoming wedding?
>
> You can. And you can get a $1,000 discount, too.
>
> How? It's easy. If your wedding is set for an off-peak date, you can save
> $1,000 on your wedding photography AND have us be there on your big day,
> snapping shots you'll love forever.
>
> Find out if your wedding date is eligible for a discount now.
>
> That's what I'd do. When they click through, you can then have something that
> shows them off peak dates, with a "eligible for a $1,000 discount", and below
> it have the note about peak dates and their bonus.
>
> Some knowledge for you:
>
> Perceptually, writing out a number in full, with the comma ($1,000), makes it
> look like more than when you don't have the comma ($1000). The number is
> longer with the comma, and therefore our minds think it's a larger amount.
>
> So use the comma when giving discounts. (For example, "You'll save $2,500 off
> the regular rate!") Take it out when trying to downplay costs. (For example,
> "It'll only cost you $5000.")
>
> See how that works? Even in this email, the $2,500 looks like more money than
> the $5000!
>
>
>
>
> Cheers,
>
> James Chartrand
> Damn Fine Words/Damn Fine Ebooks
> www.damnfinewords.com
>
> Connect with me:
>
> On Mon, Dec 8, 2014 at 4:00 PM, Andree Kehn <andreekehn@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> Excellent, thank you both!
>
> I've got to get this 100% settled soon!
>
>
>
> On Dec 8, 2014, at 11:21 AM, Emil Moldovan wrote:
>
>> Hi Andree,
>>
>> I hopped in with some thoughts below, see *** below. Maybe it helps.
>>
>> Pe 07.12.2014 23:07, Andree Kehn a scris:
>>> I'm creating a special for "Wistful Bride". I've got a full page ad in the
>>> Real Maine Wedding magazine and handing out coupons at the bridal show
>>> (that this magazine in distributed at.) I'm fortunate to have the bride and
>>> groom joining me.
>>>
>>> Both the ad and the coupon are intended to drive people to a custom landing
>>> page on my website.
>>>
>>> I then need to persuade them to fill out my lead generation form. My end
>>> goal is to get on the phone with them. (and then talk them into booking)
>>>
>>> I'm imaging a splash page with photo of the couple and then the following
>>> text- what are you thoughts? (this is fleshed out a mini)
>>>
>>>
>>> You saw us at the bridal show or saw our advertisement.
>>> *** Want to get the special photography you deserve at a special rate?
>>> (And here you are on our website, to see if you can budget for the
>>> photography you know you deserve)
>>> You can do it! I am offering a package that is $1000 below my normal
>>> starting rate for any off-peak wedding.
>>> Is your wedding on an off-peak date? Click here, now, to find out.
>> *** Not off-peak? I've got you covered, too! OR I've got something special
>> for you, too
>>>
>>> *Couples with peak wedding dates will get your choice of a free engagement
>>> session or a complimentary Photo Booth. Just mention Real Maine Weddings!
>>
>>
>>
>>
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