[projectaon] Re: 25totw errata

On Tuesday 26 April 2011, Jonathan Blake wrote:
> On Tue, Apr 26, 2011 at 7:32 AM, David Davis <feline1@xxxxxxxxxxxxx> 
wrote:
> > I too would advise a correction to either "you recognise these
> > bacteria" or "you recognise the bacteria".
> > 
> > Even Lone Wolf's super eyesight is not going to be able to see a
> > single bacterium.
> 
> I like changing "this" for "the". How about the following?
> 
> "At once you recognize the bacteria to be Gnallia, a benign species
> of bacillus that is often used to prevent and cure infections of the
> blood. The raw bacteria is edible and rich in protein, and there is
> sufficient here for 5 Meals."

For me "The raw bacteria are [...]" sounds better. But since I'm German 
this probably doesn't mean anything. ;-)


Regards,
Ingo

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