[projectaon] Re: 25totw errata
- From: Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: Project Aon List <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Mon, 25 Apr 2011 13:28:13 -0700
On Mon, Apr 25, 2011 at 11:15 AM, Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> (er) 40: [B]lack [A]mulet. But as soon [SD: Problem: starting a
> sentence with “but”. I propose replacing the full stop with a comma.
> This is endemic throughout the book)!]
> [SO: Other sections with sentences starting with But: 56, 78, 81, 90,
> 92, 94, 96, 110, 145, 191, 211, 221, 231, 248, 275, 279, 283, 307,
> 310, 343, 347]
That went faster than expected. Here are my recommendations:
92, 96, 110, 178, 229, 248, 275, 307, 343: leave as-is
40: Amulet. But as -> Amulet. As
56, 145, 347: pedestal. But -> pedestal, but
78, 94, 221: staircase. But -> staircase, but
81: drupelets. But -> drupelets, but
90: entity. But as -> entity. As
191: attack. But despite -> attack. Despite
211: cloak. But this -> cloak. This
231: warriors. But -> warriors, but
279: attacking. But -> attacking, but
283: wall. But when -> wall. When
286: ambush. But -> ambush, but
310: off. But -> off, but
This is really a judgment call. I looked at the preceding sentence to
see whether joining the sentences would make it feel cumbersome and if
the "but" was needed at all.
--
Jon
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