[projectaon] Re: California Countdown Comment Period

  • From: Benjamin Krefetz <krefetz@xxxxxxxxx>
  • To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
  • Date: Thu, 8 Oct 2015 08:49:22 -0400

On Thu, Oct 8, 2015 at 7:41 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
wrote:

On 05-Oct-15 7:46 PM, Jonathan Blake wrote:

I think we all know the drill at this point. :)

Let's start the comment period for California Countdown, ending Sunday,
October 11. Give it a look, and report back if you find any issues. If
all goes well, we'll plan to publish on October 12!


Phew! A few more than I'd expected, but pretty good for a 'last hurrah'
(before revising Books 19-22 for footnote removal, revamping the books'
design layout, working ont he PDFs, etc. ;-) ).


Not Fixed:

(er) 29: the Tyler tow truck -> the Tylers' tow truck [SO: There are two
Tylers; cf. Section 48]


"the Tyler tow truck" still sounds fine to me with two Tylers, though it
does sound a bit colloquial in that case.


(er) 56: You pull off the freeway and follow the service road towards a
diner, the largest building in the rest-stop complex, and park your
roadster [so: Suggest changing "freeway and follow" to "freeway, follow"]

If we make this change we should also change "the largest building in the
rest-stop complex" to being set off with dashes, otherwise the sentence
mixes serial and subclause commas in a confusing way..


(er) 129: most part of an hour [so: Is this idiom OK? Usually, I'd say
'the best part of an hour', not 'the most part of'.]

I'd say "the better part of an hour", but maybe that's just American
usage. Checking Google, "the better part of an hour" gets 357k hits, "the
best part of an hour" gets 333k hits, and "the most part of an hour" gets
23.6M(!!!) hits. On the other hand, the first hits for each of "the better"
and "the best" are dictionary definitions, while the first hits for "the
most" tend to be reviews and other unofficial usage, so "the most" may be
too colloquial for use in a book.


(er) 319: San Cristobal Bridge -> San Cristobal bridge [SO: Maybe? cf.
"Santa Rosa bridge" in Section 315]

Yeah, with a quick Google search, the bridge on I-8 over the San Cristobal
Wash doesn't look so big as to be named, and the only bridge bearing the
name San Cristobal Bridge is in Mexico.


(er) 339: Nevada desert -> Nevada Desert


Keep as-is. There are multiple deserts in Nevada, and no single one has the
name Nevada Desert.

Everything else looks reasonable to me.

Ben

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