On 22/02/13 10:21, Ingo Kloecker wrote:
On Thursday 21 February 2013, Simon Osborne wrote:On 21/02/2013 17:38, Anders Österberg wrote:29: You dare not wait for the advancing horde to close in for, despite your formidable fighting skills... -> You dare not wait for the advancing horde to close in, for despite your formidable fighting skills...[FYI: This would be errata if changed. I'd agree that changing the comma position improves this.] <http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-less-simple/lw/26tfobm/title .htm#sect29>The full sentence reads: You dare not wait for the advancing horde to close in for, despite your formidable fighting skills, this enemy is heavily armed and you are greatly outnumbered. "despite your formidable fighting skills" could easily be left out, so, grammatically speaking, the two commas seem to be placed correctly.
I agree.
OTOH, the placement of "despite your formidable fighting skills" feels/sounds weird.
It doesnt sound weird to me as its a parenthetical element. Take, for example, this sentence. If you replaced the commas with parentheses would you still read the sentence the same way?
I read the sentence like "[...], despite your formidable fighting skills, this enemy is heavily armed [...]" which is non-sensical because "your fighting skills" certainly are completely unrelated to the enemy's amount of armour.
An enemy with more armour requires more fighting skills to defeat than an unarmoured/lighter armoured one (eg its much harder to hit someone in the throat to kill them if they are wearing a gorget). Being outnumbered requires more fighting skills to defeat than fighting one-on-one. Being outnumbered by heavily armoured enemies requires yet more fighting skills to defeat.
Im not sure why you think these two things are unrelated.
I would reorder the text as follows: Despite your formidable fighting skills, you dare not wait for the advancing horde to close in for this enemy is heavily armed and you are greatly outnumbered.
I disagree (but then again the sentence makes sense to me). If anything I would replace the commas with parentheses (but that then strengthens the emphasis on the parenthetical element - and I dont think that is needed).
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