[projectaon] Re: Editor's Companion Submission
- From: Jonathan Blake <jonathan.blake@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Thu, 3 Dec 2009 12:04:30 -0800
On Thu, Dec 3, 2009 at 3:57 AM, Thomas Wolmer <angantyr@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> 2009/12/3 Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>:
>> OK, let's try this, then:
>>
>> <http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/15tdc/sect25.htm>
Looks great. :)
> Let's not close this can of worms quite yet :-)
>
> Section 315 is almost completely wrong in its description of what
> actually happened at Cetza: "During the fighting at Cetza you and he
> led Prince Graygor's reserves in a decisive action that helped save
> the Eruan Guards and turn the tide of the battle in your favour."
>
> Er, no. You (LW) may lead the Prince's reserves to help save the Eruan
> Palace Guard, but then you *don't* fight together with Prarg. What you
> do together with Prarg is to gather scattered soldiers to help save
> the Lencian knights in their struggle at the bridge.
Head, desk. That definitely needs to change, IMHO. How should we word that?
--
Jon
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