Keith Sheldon wrote: Rel, you rock! (Rock'n'Rel!) > (ne) 16tlov 350: consumed ... everything, -> consumed . . . everything, [KS: > Appears the ellipses are not spaced correctly, but I may be wrong.] [so: I think this might be caused by an extra space before the encoded ellipsis.] > (er) 16tlov 341: towards the north-east. -> towards the northeast. [KS: Just > suggesting. . .] > (er) 16tlov 341: a north-easterly route -> a northeasterly route [KS: Again, > not sure on this one.] [so: A ruling on hyphenated (or not) compass points would be a welcome addition to the MoS.] > (er) 16tlov 339: first-floor ruins -> first floor ruins [so: I think the original hypenated form is OK here.] > (er) 16tlov 319: rank of Kai Grand Mastership, -> rank of Kai mastery, [KS: > I can't think of anywhere else that a choice was phrased that way, does this > seem odd to anyone else? Everything else I saw was Kai mastery.] [so: I think we decided before to leave occurrences of 'Grand Mastership', although it is a weird phrase.] > (er) 16tlov 319: without trace. -> without a trace. [KS: Never heard it that > way before. Could be me. . .] [so: The original is probably a UK variant. 'Vanished without trace' is quite acceptable.] > (er) 16tlov 315: the king's death -> the King's death [KS: Important office > title capitalized here?] [so: I think capitalising King is probably best in this instance because it is talking about a specific King; it's not a general term.] > (ne) 16tlov 304: a loud Thok! [KS: In the text, the word Thok! (is that a > word?;)) is italicized.] [so: It's onomatopoeia and should be encoded as such. There are no real rules governing onomatopoeic words since they're all made up! ;-)] > (er) 16tlov 302: Kai pathsmanship Discipline -> Kai Pathsmanship Discipline > [KS: -or- Magnakai Pathsmanship Discipline] [so: My own pref is the second one since Pathsmanship is a Magnakai Discipline.] -- Simon Osborne