here are the other errors from book 15. i marked each instance (that i noticed) of the giak plural ending '-im' being used with a singular noun or adjective. however, i ignored each instance when the '-im' ending was used with a noun used as a plural adjective (e.g. drakkarim horsemen). after finishing my read though i realised that in nouns used as adjectives in english the singular form is usually (always?) used (e.g. bank vaults. banks vaults would sound silly). if this rule applies to giak loan words as well, there are a number more erroneous incidences which i did not indicate in the list.
for sommerlund and the kai leroy mcswain<tssf> paragraph5 Your discovery, has inspired => Your discovery has inspired paragraph8 In the regions to the northeast of Magador and the Maakengorge,=> ? to the northwest of Magador and the Maakengorge
paragraph 13 promise of Nadziranim power => promise of Nadziran powerparagraph 17 one of Dakushna's Nadziranim sorcerers. => one of Dakushna's Nadziran sorcerers. disciplines (kai screen) The strength and capacity of these fortresses increases => increase disciplines (telegnosis) Duration, and the protection of his inanimate body, increases => Duration and the protection of his inanimate body increase
3 your guide, then suddenly => your guide; then suddenly 8 long pause, then a => long pause; then a8 suggests that he escorts => suggests that he escort (subjunctive mode?) 13 small secluded cover => small secluded cove (as in parallel sections)
16 the cabin, then, as => the cabin; then, as 16 a Drakkarim sergeant => a Drakkar sergeant 17 mid-air, then it => mid-air; then it 17 a fortified Drakkarim stronghold => a fortified Drakkar stronghold 19 'we must get away => 'We must get away 19 him so, then he => him so; then he 21 Zagganozod => ???Zaggannozod (armour + horse) 21 few words, then they => few words; then they 23 each craft, then you => each craft; then you 25 to succeed, therefore no => to succeed; therefore no 26 a Drakkarim guard => a Drakkar guard29 You check your map and discover it to be a fortified Drakkarim stronghold. => You check your map and discover it to be Konozod, a fortified Drakkar stronghold. (as in parallel sections) 31 It is near to exhaustion => He is near to exhaustion (to match 'he' later in sentence)
36 his breath, then he => his breath; then he 38 the Arrow, then its => the Arrow; then its 38 suspecting trickery, then slowly => suspecting trickery. Then slowly 39 its Drakkarim garrison => its Drakkar garrison 40 faint click, then the => faint click; then the 41 fright; the => fright, the 42 The Nadziranim sorcerer => The Nadziran sorcerer 43 at worse => at worst??? 45 in agreement then together => in agreement; then together 46 large Drakkarim backpack => large Drakkar backpack 47 unnatural silence, then suddenly => unnatural silence; then suddenly 50 the Drakkarim escort => the Drakkar escort 54 Zagganozod => ???Zaggannozod (armour + horse) 57 Tukodaks ??? (elsewhere 'Tukodak' is used as the plural form) 61 his men, then you => his men; then you 63 an 駘ite Drakkarim warrior => an 駘ite Drakkar warrior 64 a Drakkarim guard => a Drakkar guard 65 a Drakkarim encampment => a Drakkar encampment 65 a Drakkarim officer => a Drakkar officer 67 stairs to tower door => stairs to the tower door 67 complete silence, then he => complete silence; then he 70 rusty cover, then you => rusty cover; then you 71 a Drakkarim platoon => a Drakkar platoon 72 suspecting trickery, then slowly => suspecting trickery; then slowly 77 a fortified Drakkarim stronghold => a fortified Drakkar stronghold78 slabs of rock, veined marble and other temple debris => slabs of rock, veined marble, and other temple debris
90 a Drakkarim patrol => a Drakkar patrol 90 north east => north-east 90 Drakkarim town => Drakkar town 91 Tunnel Stalker, then you => Tunnel Stalker; then you 95 Zagganozod => ???Zaggannozod (armour + horse) 95 crusader's brave attack. => crusaders' brave attack. 101 a Drakkarim Death Knight Sergeant => a Drakkar Death Knight Sergeant 104 evoke => invoke 105 a Drakkarim cavalry platoon => a Drakkar cavalry platoon 108 hear splashes, then suddenly => hear splashes; then suddenly 111 to strike, then, with => to strike; then, with 115 A troop of Drakkarim cavalry are => A troop of Drakkarim cavalry is 118 come a regiment => comes a regiment123 approaching footsteps, then through => approaching footsteps; then through
124 the Drakkarim sergeant => the Drakkar sergeant 125 city gates, then you => city gates; then you125 A regiment of Lencian Crusaders are => A regiment of Lencian Crusaders is
125 group of Lencians are => group of Lencians is 129 no response, then a => no response; then a 137 berates them, then he => berates them; then he 137 to pass, then you => to pass; then you 141 in future => in the future 146 a Drakkarim guard => a Drakkar guard 147 a Drakkarim Death Knight Sergeant => a Drakkar Death Knight Sergeant 148 your blow, then its => your blow; then its 148 their sockets, then stiffly => their sockets; then stiffly 148 suspecting trickery, then slowly => suspecting trickery. Then slowly 149 the group, then dutifully => the group; then dutifully 150 You're not Drakkarim or Lencian => You're not Drakkar or Lencian 158 you can, then you => you can; then you 161 a Nadziranim sorcerer => a Nadziran sorcerer 162 flailing wildly, then it => flailing wildly; then it 162 rusty bars, then you => rusty bars; then you 162 brisk pace: After a => brisk pace. After a 163 who instinctively you recognize => whom instinctively you recognize 165 Tozaz forest, then, the => Tozaz forest; then, the166 The garrison is thrown into a state of near-panic as they => The garrison is thrown into a state of near-panic as it
171 . it is a landmark => . It is a landmark 176 your mate Kai skills => your innate Kai skills 180 quiver => ???Quiver 182 a Drakkarim Death Knight Sergeant => a Drakkar Death Knight Sergeant 183 your attack, then suddenly => your attack; then suddenly 184 to flight of stone steps => to a flight of stone steps 185 suspecting trickery, then slowly => suspecting trickery. Then slowly189 the failing light, and the increasing sightings of Drakkarim patrols, forces => the failing light, and the increasing sightings of Drakkarim patrols, force
190 a massive hammer blow => ???massive hammer blows 190 end-over-end, then, with => end-over-end; then, with 193 smooth, dry and crumbly, => smooth, dry, and crumbly, 198 Drakkarim Sergeant => Drakkar Sergeant 201 his death, then a => his death; then a 202 the beach then, shaking => the beach; then, shaking 204 and. he => and he206 Gaz rekenarim! => ??? (should this be 'Gaza' or 'Gazim' to agree in number with 'rekenarim'?)
207 entire arm, then a => entire arm; then a 213 the Drakkarim commander => the Drakkar commander 215 he needs, then, with => he needs; then, with 222 a halt, then, very => a halt; then, very 233 your breath, then you => your breath; then you 227 minutes pass, then a => minutes pass; then a 227 it antlered head => its antlered head 227 through forest => through the forest 227 tree-line, then you => tree-line; then you 231 The Drakkarim garrison => The Drakkar garrison 232 The Drakkarim sergeant => The Drakkar sergeant 232 Drakkarim Sergeant => Drakkar Sergeant 240 steadily louder, then several => steadily louder; then several 241 an Arrow, then you => an Arrow; then you 245 to pass, then you => to pass; then you 248 wave of Drakkarim cavalry slam => wave of Drakkarim cavalry slams 248 against the square and are => against the square and is 248 heavy losses, then a => heavy losses; then a248 Their armour, and the sheer weight of their attack, smashes => Their armour, and the sheer weight of their attack, smash
248 Zagganozod => ???zaggannozod (armour + horse) 251 a fortified Drakkarim stronghold => a fortified Drakkar stronghold 252 a Drakkarim guard => a Drakkar guard 257 a Drakkarim machine => a Drakkar machine 259 horse trough, then they => horse trough; then they 260 Drakkarim patrol => Drakkar patrol 262 Drakkarim cavalry => Drakkar cavalry 264 and stiffen, then, with => and stiffen; then, with 266 The Drakkarim sergeant => The Drakkar sergeant 267 Zagganozod => ???Zaggannozod (armour + horse) 269 a fortified Drakkarim stronghold => a fortified Drakkar stronghold 272 this Drakkarim horde => this Drakkar horde 274 be raining, then you => be raining; then you275 a small cabin hidden among the trees. It comprises four white canvas tents => (should 'cabin' be 'camp' as in parallel sections?)
278 a fortified Drakkarim stronghold => a fortified Drakkar stronghold 279 a shudder, then suddenly => a shudder; then suddenly 280 leap out and seizes him. => leaps out and seizes him. 287 a fortified Drakkarim stronghold => a fortified Drakkar stronghold 288 of focus, then darkness => of focus; then darkness290 If you possess Kai-alchemy => (this probably should include 'and wish to use it,' because 'Any attempt to pick this lock could prove fatal.')
295 a Drakkarim sergeant => a Drakkar sergeant296 someone is nearby. You can tell that they are => someone is nearby. You can tell that he is
(or) => someone is nearby who is 296 You detect they are somewhere => You detect he is somewhere298 You remove your hand to reveal the citadel of Holmgard stamped on the reverse side of the coin. => (according to ref.56, the coin is showing 'heads')
304 faint click, then the => faint click; then the 314 you further, then the => you further; then the 314 climb them, then you => climb them; then you 314 the Drakkarim garrison is => the Drakkar garrison is 316 long pause, then a => long pause; then a322 you ship the oars => you unship (?) the oars (dictionary.com defines 'ship' as 'To place (an oar) in a resting position inside a boat without removing it from the oarlock.')
322 the oars, then together => the oars; then together 323 to pass, then you => to pass; then you 325 'we must => 'We must 329 have seen, then you => have seen; then you 330 a Drakkarim guard => a Drakkar guard 335 With a shriek; the => With a shriek, the337 Gaz rekenarim! => ??? (should this be 'Gaza' or 'Gazim' to agree in number with 'rekenarim'?)
341 crusader's => crusaders' 346 stream of bubbles are => stream of bubbles is 349 suspecting trickery, then slowly => suspecting trickery. Then slowly _________________________________________________________________大切なあの人、気になるあの人とケータイでチャット! http://messenger.live.jp/mobile.htm
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