On Thu, 29 Jul 2010, Jonathan Blake wrote:
(er) 61, 289, 334: If you survive -> If you complete [SO: Or, this mission successfully -> this mission] This one is testing my resolve to only change wording that is incorrect or misleading/burdensome to the reader. The idea that you could be successful in surviving a mission is not incorrect and it hints that you must not only survive but be successful for future missions to take place. But I like Simon's suggestion.... I vote leave as is.
Thing is, as currently written, "successfully" modifies "survive", which means it's contrasting with "survive unsuccessfully". I understand how you can be unsuccessful at surviving something, but I don't think you can survive something unsuccessfully.
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