On 8/28/2015 12:23 AM, Jonathan Blake wrote:
On Thu, 27 Aug 2015 at 08:53 Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx
<mailto:outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>> wrote:
> Aside from a few (ne) issues which I've fixed-in-xml already, here's
> what I spotted in my run-through of The Omega Zone...
> (er) 44, 93, 104, 294: OK then -> OK, then
> (er) 100: Very well then -> Very well, then [so: maybe]
> (er) 177: OK men -> OK, men
I tend to agree with Ben here. Do people usually offset "OK" with a
comma? It feel unnatural in this circumstance because colloquially,
people don't pause between "OK" and the rest of the sentence, and "very
well then" is also spoken without pause.
> (er) 149: bridge: the other -> bridge; the other
Agreed.
> (er) 190: their path, leading to -> their path, which leads to [so:
> could be more flowery: "their path, which ultimately leads to" but
> that's not necessary. The original wording just seems odd to me, though.]
Agreed.
> (er) 264: Michigan stirring him -> Michigan, stirring him
