[projectaon] Re: Comment period for 03toz
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Thu, 27 Aug 2015 16:53:46 +0100
On 8/25/2015 4:28 AM, Jonathan Blake wrote:
Hot off the presses with all the latest corrections, here are our test
versions of The Omega Zone:
http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/fw/03toz/title.htm
http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml-less-simple/fw/03toz/title.htm
Hi
Aside from a few (ne) issues which I've fixed-in-xml already, here's
what I spotted in my run-through of The Omega Zone...
(er) 44, 93, 104, 294: OK then -> OK, then
(er) 100: Very well then -> Very well, then [so: maybe]
(er) 149: bridge: the other -> bridge; the other
(er) 177: OK men -> OK, men
(er) 190: their path, leading to -> their path, which leads to [so:
could be more flowery: "their path, which ultimately leads to" but
that's not necessary. The original wording just seems odd to me, though.]
(er) 264: Michigan stirring him -> Michigan, stirring him
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Simon Osborne
Project Aon
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