[projectaon] Re: Comment period for 03toz

  • From: Jonathan Blake <jonathan.blake@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
  • To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
  • Date: Thu, 27 Aug 2015 23:23:44 +0000

On Thu, 27 Aug 2015 at 08:53 Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:

Aside from a few (ne) issues which I've fixed-in-xml already, here's
what I spotted in my run-through of The Omega Zone...

(er) 44, 93, 104, 294: OK then -> OK, then
(er) 100: Very well then -> Very well, then [so: maybe]
(er) 177: OK men -> OK, men

I tend to agree with Ben here. Do people usually offset "OK" with a comma?
It feel unnatural in this circumstance because colloquially, people don't
pause between "OK" and the rest of the sentence, and "very well then" is
also spoken without pause.

(er) 149: bridge: the other -> bridge; the other

Agreed.

(er) 190: their path, leading to -> their path, which leads to [so:
could be more flowery: "their path, which ultimately leads to" but
that's not necessary. The original wording just seems odd to me, though.]

Agreed.

(er) 264: Michigan stirring him -> Michigan, stirring him

Agreed.

Thanks, Simon.

--
Jon

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