This is not a review comment, but a playability comment... In section 85, it says you may take 2 items - but no reason is given. There is a pile of salvage there, I have room in my backpack - why would I not take as much as I can? Sometimes when it says you can only take N items, it is because somebody is offering you something from a selection. In this case though, there seems no rationale - should we include a footnote of some description? > Date: Sat, 21 Jun 2008 10:57:04 +0100> From: outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> To: > projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx> Subject: [projectaon] Re: 01hh Comment Period> > > Jonathan Blake wrote:> > The day has arrived for the comment period for > Highway Holocaust.> > Here are my observations (I'm sorry there's so many):> > > ||(er) ||Many: ||<blah>, then -> <blah>, and then [or, <blah; then (where > > appropriate)]||> ||(er) ||22: ||murderously chilling -> chilling [??]||> > ||(er) ||23: ||C'mon you two -> C'mon, you two||> ||(er) ||68: ||Don't delay > now. -> Don't delay, now.||> ||(er) ||90: ||lack of hair and -> lack of hair, > and||> ||(er) ||107: ||[+others?]: the first...reach -> the > first...reaches||> ||(er) ||116: ||flick the power switch on -> flick the > power switch [or, flick > the power switch to on]||> ||(er) ||170: ||a' > skirtin' -> a-skirtin' [??]||> ||(ne) ||196: ||to he blocking -> to be > blocking||> ||(er) ||116, 290: ||If you possess a missile weapon -> If you > possess a missile > weapon, and sufficient ammunition to use it||> ||(er) > ||219: ||mixture, are -> mixture are||> ||(er) ||222: ||a few hours sleep -> > a few hours' sleep [or, a few hours of sleep]||> ||(er) ||222: ||single > vehicle to -> single vehicle, to||> ||(er) ||222: ||seen, then -> seen, and > then||> ||(er) ||227: ||Why you sly -> Why, you sly||> ||(er) ||270: ||unit). > -> unit.)||> ||(er) ||289: ||impact, then -> impact, and then||> ||(er) > ||286: ||halt, then -> halt, and then||> ||(er) ||307: ||If you have a > missile weapon, and wish to use it -> If you wish > to return fire with your > missile weapon||> > Because there was so many, I've also added them to the > Errata page: > <http://www.projectaon.org/en/Errata/HighwayHolocaust>> > > Hopefully these can be accepted/rejected without too much stress. The > "biggie" > is the "<blah>, then" issue which affects ALL of the books. > Although it's a lot > of work, it probably should get fixed. Once a precedent > is set, I'll start > trawling through the other books fixing this for > consistency.> > -- > Simon Osborne> Project Aon Fault-finder> > ~~~~~~> > Manage your subscription at //www.freelists.org/list/projectaon> >