Jonathan Blake wrote:
The day has arrived for the comment period for Highway Holocaust.
Here are my observations (I'm sorry there's so many):||(er) ||Many: ||<blah>, then -> <blah>, and then [or, <blah; then (where appropriate)]||
||(er) ||22: ||murderously chilling -> chilling [??]|| ||(er) ||23: ||C'mon you two -> C'mon, you two|| ||(er) ||68: ||Don't delay now. -> Don't delay, now.|| ||(er) ||90: ||lack of hair and -> lack of hair, and|| ||(er) ||107: ||[+others?]: the first...reach -> the first...reaches||||(er) ||116: ||flick the power switch on -> flick the power switch [or, flick the power switch to on]||
||(er) ||170: ||a' skirtin' -> a-skirtin' [??]|| ||(ne) ||196: ||to he blocking -> to be blocking||||(er) ||116, 290: ||If you possess a missile weapon -> If you possess a missile weapon, and sufficient ammunition to use it||
||(er) ||219: ||mixture, are -> mixture are|| ||(er) ||222: ||a few hours sleep -> a few hours' sleep [or, a few hours of sleep]|| ||(er) ||222: ||single vehicle to -> single vehicle, to|| ||(er) ||222: ||seen, then -> seen, and then|| ||(er) ||227: ||Why you sly -> Why, you sly|| ||(er) ||270: ||unit). -> unit.)|| ||(er) ||289: ||impact, then -> impact, and then|| ||(er) ||286: ||halt, then -> halt, and then||||(er) ||307: ||If you have a missile weapon, and wish to use it -> If you wish to return fire with your missile weapon||
Because there was so many, I've also added them to the Errata page: <http://www.projectaon.org/en/Errata/HighwayHolocaust>
Hopefully these can be accepted/rejected without too much stress. The "biggie" is the "<blah>, then" issue which affects ALL of the books. Although it's a lot of work, it probably should get fixed. Once a precedent is set, I'll start trawling through the other books fixing this for consistency.
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