[projectaon] Re: 28thos errata
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Thu, 05 Jun 2014 11:43:30 +0100
Hi Jon
We're so close to Book 28...so very close... :-)
On 04/06/2014 19:38, Jonathan Blake wrote:
(er) 137: If you wish to attempt to stop him with your Bow [jc: What
if you do not possess a Bow?]
Suggestion: If you wish to attempt to stop him with a Bow, turn to 65.
Done!
(er) 144: improved weapon skill -> Weaponmastery
[or, "improved [W|w]eaponskill"]
I agree if only because "weapon skill" can be confused with "Weaponskill".
Done!
(er) 148: Javain Bandit [jc: Javai Bandit, or Javaian Bandit]
Not much help there, but I kind of like the sound of "Javainese". We
have used Chai/Chaian elsewhere in this and the preceding book
although the author never did. Maybe we should go with "Javaian" to be
consistent with that.
Done!
(er) 172, 225: weapon -> Kai Weapon
Agreed just so it's absolutely clear that you're not dropping a regular weapon.
Done!
(er) 187: Papers of State -> papers of state
[so: This is probably correct, since it is referring to specific legal
documents.]
I can see a problem where this may confuse a player into thinking this
is an item that can be picked up. I don't think we lose much by making
this change although I'm not sure how much we gain either. It wouldn't
be a huge problem if players carry around "Papers of State" in their
Backpack. I lean toward making this change.
OK, change made. I don't think it's necessary, but I'm not particularly
bothered either way. Done!
(er) 188, 231: “You launch a Mindblast at the warrior” [sd: I just
don’t think this flows well grammatically… maybe “You launch a
Mindblast pulse at the warrior”, or words to that effect, something to
describe the nature of the attack, rather than just call it “a
Mindblast”]
This is used a few times in the books. The Improved Disciplines
sections also has the phrase "more so than a usual Kai-surge,
Psi-surge, or Mindblast". I think this usage is pretty well
established by the author.
Rejected!
Less than a dozen issues left for Book 28! Who would have imagined this
back in 1999?
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Simon Osborne
Project Aon
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