Stephan Assmus Stephan Assmus <superstippi@xxxxxx> wrote: > > On 2010-05-09 at 20:16:43 [+0200], Jonas Sundström <jonas@xxxxxxxxxxx> > wrote: > > > > I made some changes to the press release. > > Feel free to use or lose. > > > > http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6414011/R1-Alpha2-PR-REVISED-kirilla.pdf > > http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6414011/R1-Alpha2-PR-REVISED-kirilla.odt > > I really like the tone of this one. IMHO it's the best version yet. > However I believe the sentences containing "we" need to be reworded, > since many news sites may want to use the text as is, in another > words, it cannot sound as they are "we". Would you want to make these > changes, Jonas? Yeah I can try if it's not too late. Does this look okay? http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6414011/R1-Alpha2-PR-REVISED-kirilla-2.pdf http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6414011/R1-Alpha2-PR-REVISED-kirilla-2.odt I cut a passing I found problematic, and also added a trademark line. /Jonas
