On 9 May 2010 22:44, Stephan Assmus <superstippi@xxxxxx> wrote: > > On 2010-05-09 at 20:16:43 [+0200], Jonas Sundström <jonas@xxxxxxxxxxx> > wrote: > > > > I made some changes to the press release. > > Feel free to use or lose. > > > > http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6414011/R1-Alpha2-PR-REVISED-kirilla.pdf > > http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6414011/R1-Alpha2-PR-REVISED-kirilla.odt > > I really like the tone of this one. IMHO it's the best version yet. However > I believe the sentences containing "we" need to be reworded, since many > news sites may want to use the text as is, in another words, it cannot > sound as they are "we". Would you want to make these changes, Jonas? > > Best regards, > -Stephan > > +1 It's very very good. Perhaps "we aspire to" could be changed to "the project developers aspire to"? Regards, Nik