[lit-ideas] Re: Tuesday Poem
- From: "Mike Geary" <atlas@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: <lit-ideas@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Tue, 16 Oct 2007 21:29:29 -0500
I like this poem, Lawrence. I really like the images. It reminds me for some
reason of Dylan's "All Along the Watchtower" If you'll forgive my
presumptuousness, I'd ditch the title, much too grandiose, -- my first reaction
was Oh Christ, here we go again with the Truth and Justice bit -- and the last
line has a scent of tendentiousness about it. I think a little imagistic
stiffening would help there. Leave 'em guessing. Thanks for sharing it.
Yes, I hate people who make suggestions, too.
Mike
----- Original Message -----
From: Lawrence Helm
To: Lit-Ideas
Sent: Tuesday, October 16, 2007 1:19 PM
Subject: [lit-ideas] Tuesday Poem
Truth and Justice
The truth you ask, and justice?
They are a day's camel ride away.
Cinch your burnoose about you.
The wind will whip the sand.
The dunes will bleed in falls.
The way isn't clear, but
My camel knows the way.
There is an oasis a day's
Ride from here. You'll see
The shimmer and the palms
Bouncing in and out,
Even issuing from the desert
Edicts from all that
Eden portended.
And beyond that a castle,
Ruined by countless wars,
Stones from nowhere near
Anywhere we've been
Were used. It is a day's
Ride my camel knows.
Does yours?
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