[haiku-web] Re: first changes to getting involved page

On Sat, Jul 26, 2008 at 12:51 PM, Urias McCullough <umccullough@xxxxxxxxx>wrote:

> 2008/7/26 Dennis d'Entremont <dennis.dentremont@xxxxxxxxx>:
> > I`ve drafted a document with some changes to the getting involved page
> > (http://www.haiku-os.org/getting_involved_in_haiku). It`s in Open
> Document
> > format and would like some comments as to whether or not these first
> changes
> > are ok. They are just minor but once I get a better idea of what the web
> > team wants I`ll be able to make some more changes to either this page or
> > other areas of the site that need updating.
>
> Thanks :) - the changes are good.
>
> "rapidly" is misspelled
>
> I think maybe the "Create Awareness" section under business sounds a
> bit redundant - maybe we could change it to just "Marketing - ..." or
> something, with some slightly different wording that is more
> business-oriented.


Sure, I'll try something else to see if it works better.


>
>
> just scanning through, I see a couple more changes that would be nice.
> First, we should try to keep it gender-neutral (i know, most people
> don't care about this sort of thing, but it doesn't hurt):
>
> "having much in his wallet." should be "having much in their wallet."
>
> "of someone he knows." should be "of someone they know."
>
> etc.


I wasn't really thinking of this sort of thing but I think you are right. It
should be gender neutral. I will change it :)



>
>
> I also see some grammar issues elsewhere:
>
> "someone to be a sizable help Haiku without having to do much" --
> missing a "to" there I think
>
> Can you give it a couple of further scans for other similar errors?
> Also feel free to change any wording that doesn't sound right, or
> doesn't flow well.


Sure thing.


>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Urias


Thanks for the feedback Urias. That's exactly what I was looking for.

Dennis


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