On Sat, Jul 26, 2008 at 12:51 PM, Urias McCullough <umccullough@xxxxxxxxx>wrote: > 2008/7/26 Dennis d'Entremont <dennis.dentremont@xxxxxxxxx>: > > I`ve drafted a document with some changes to the getting involved page > > (http://www.haiku-os.org/getting_involved_in_haiku). It`s in Open > Document > > format and would like some comments as to whether or not these first > changes > > are ok. They are just minor but once I get a better idea of what the web > > team wants I`ll be able to make some more changes to either this page or > > other areas of the site that need updating. > > Thanks :) - the changes are good. > > "rapidly" is misspelled > > I think maybe the "Create Awareness" section under business sounds a > bit redundant - maybe we could change it to just "Marketing - ..." or > something, with some slightly different wording that is more > business-oriented. Sure, I'll try something else to see if it works better. > > > just scanning through, I see a couple more changes that would be nice. > First, we should try to keep it gender-neutral (i know, most people > don't care about this sort of thing, but it doesn't hurt): > > "having much in his wallet." should be "having much in their wallet." > > "of someone he knows." should be "of someone they know." > > etc. I wasn't really thinking of this sort of thing but I think you are right. It should be gender neutral. I will change it :) > > > I also see some grammar issues elsewhere: > > "someone to be a sizable help Haiku without having to do much" -- > missing a "to" there I think > > Can you give it a couple of further scans for other similar errors? > Also feel free to change any wording that doesn't sound right, or > doesn't flow well. Sure thing. > > > Thanks, > > Urias Thanks for the feedback Urias. That's exactly what I was looking for. Dennis > > ----------------------------------------------------------------------- > haiku-web@xxxxxxxxxxxxx - Haiku Web & Developer Support Discussion List > > -- Dennis d'Entremont IT Professional CNA, MCP, A+, ITIL LinkedIn Profile - http://www.linkedin.com/in/dennisdentremont http://www.techalpha.net - Tech Alpha Computer Forums http://nerfd.net - Nerfd Technologies http://eComStation.ca - Your Canadian Source for eCS and OS/2 Software! http://Haikuware.com - Software for Haiku http://Haiku-OS.org - Haiku Operating System