On Tue, Sep 30, 2008 at 3:39 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > More pestering, I'm afraid, but only a little. It's an exercise in cleaning > up the first seven books, since they require the least amount of work. > > ---------- > > 4: The Chasm of Doom: > > 272: "You smash feet first into a large river boulder." > > * feet first -> feet-first ? Right (at least according to our Manual of Style). > 5: Shadow on the Sand: > > 124: "You leap from the window ledge and crash feet first into the > guards..." > > * feet first -> feet-first ? Right. > 234: "In a complete daze you tumble and spin, totally unaware of whether you > are falling head or feet first" > > * head or feet first -> head- or feet-first ? [probably not] Right. > 7: Castle Death: > > 27: [Jan Charvát: If you possess Jewelled Mace, you should get a bonus > +5 CS in this fight (this enemy is evil spectre, and so is Dhorgaan in book > 5)] > > (Book 5 Section 253: "Out of the darkness, a green whorl of vapour is > forming slowly into the shape of a glistening, serpent-like monster. A grey > mist issues forth from the Darklord's mouth, floating towards the core of > this horror, infusing it with the power of death. The serpent writhes and > convulses as the grey mist fills its body, changing it from a dream-like > illusion into a living nightmare. ... If you possess a Jewelled Mace, you > may add 5 to your COMBAT SKILL for the duration of the combat, for it is an > enchanted weapon, especially effective against such a creature." > > vs. > > Book 7 Section 27: "A shape is taking form in the doorway, a shadowy figure > with flaming red eyes. An icy chill grips your heart as it sweeps past you > with a swirling rush of wind. You spin round to see it hovering in the sky, > its shadowy hand now gripping a great spiked ball and chain. It shrieks an > unearthly cry, and the ball whistles down towards your unprotected face." // > Section 38: "Your psychic senses tell you that what you see before you is an > illusion. The Oudakon is a spectral force ...") > > * I don't think these creatures are all that similar, so I would think this > can be rejected. I don't think we have anything authoritative to say here. The most we could do is suggest that the bonus might be applicable here. > 73: Kakush vases -> Kakushian vases [so: cf. Section 293: Anarian] [jb: > The only precedent specific to Kakush that I can find is in 299: "Kakush > mercenaries".] > 199: Kakush mercenary -> Kakushian mercenary [so: cf. Section 293: > Anarian] [jb: I'm not sure this is strictly necessary.] > > * See: Sommerlund vs. Sommlending Cf. "New York cabbie", "Boston clam chowder" :) > 257: Can the Towel from the Bathhouse in Book 5 be used instead of a > Blanket? [Francis Legault] > > * This makes sense. But should it be footnoted or added directly into the > section text? Footnoted I guess. Are there any other Blanket-like Items we should mention? ;) > 322: If you wish to step over the beam of light and continue along the > passage, turn to 88. If you choose to walk through the beam, turn to 240. -> > If you wish to step over the beam of light and continue along the passage, > turn to 240. If you choose to walk through the beam, turn to 88. [jc: I > think there are reversed references. LW should be hurted, if he choose to go > through the beam, but he's hurted when he step over the beam. ] > > * Any thoughts? I've always suspected the same, but Zhada's a crazy guy. Who knows what he's up to in his madhouse? > 350: Dessi's evil shadow -> Zhada's evil shadow [SO: The original wording > sort of makes sense, but I think this would be an improvement] > > * I spotted this when reading through the new Mongoose edition; I > double-checked to see if the text had been changed, but our edition says > exactly the same. I can see where you're coming from. I read it as equivalent to "the evil shadow of Dessi" which makes sense to me. -- Jon ~~~~~~ Manage your subscription at //www.freelists.org/list/projectaon