[projectaon] Re: 21votm errata
- From: Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: Project Aon List <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Sun, 22 Mar 2009 09:24:49 -0700
On Wed, Mar 18, 2009 at 8:26 PM, Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> More another day.
(er) 102: Magnakai healing -> Magnakai Curing
Either that or "Kai healing skills" as in the most generic sense of
the word Kai.
(er) 106: well furnished -> well-furnished [SD]
OK as-is.
(er) 111, 256: militia, who are following closely, split -> militia,
which is following closely, splits [LM]
That's a toss-up. I vote leave as-is.
(er) 111, 256: half their number search the other alley whilst the
remainder stay -> half their number searches the other alley whilst
the remainder stays [LM]
agreed
(er) 126: crowd scream and scatter -> crowd screams and scatters [LM]
It makes more sense to me that the crowd screams individually, even
more so for scattering. Leave as-is.
(er) 126, 212: yours and Oriah's horses -> both horses [or similar]
It's certainly awkward, but the suggested change is ambiguous to me.
It might make it less awkward to rephrase the sentence slightly:
"steeds, with yours".
(er) 129, 269: crew scream -> crew screams [LM]
Same justification as 126. Leave as-is.
(er) 131, 149, 191: with this he -> with this, he [SD]
agreed
(er) 135: city guardsmen -> City Guardsmen
Our manual of style allows us to make a judgment call on this (if it
didn't I would fix it) and it seems unnecessary to capitalize here.
The phrase is generic enough that I think it would give the wrong
impression to capitalize. I doubt that City Guardsmen is the formal
name of their group.
(er) 138, 216, 262, 271, 349: good-night -> goodnight
The hyphenated form seems more standard.
(er) 139: host of screaming warriors are -> ? host of screaming warriors is
[LM]
agreed
(er) 146: [Bir Rabalou--160 miles.] [SD: Signpost info. Not ALL CAPS
in original text; should be changed for consistency]
I'm not clear on what's being suggested here.
(er) 146, 336: script: Bir Rabalou-160 miles.-> script: 'Bir
Rabalou-160 miles' [LM]
As long as there's still a period at the end, agreed.
(er) 146: You, too, are -> You too are [SD]
agreed
(er) 149: queue groan -> queue groans [LM]
Same justification as 126. Leave as-is.
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Jon
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