Dear Robert,
Many thanks for your response and amendments, with both of which I agree. I
included then in the text of this Chapter. I agree with your motivation and
explanation. Thank you.
With love, best wishes for peace from harmony based on science,
Leo
Dr Leo Semashko:
State Councillor of St. Petersburg, Russia;
Philosopher, Sociologist and Peacemaker from Harmony;
Director: Tetrasociology Public Institute;
Founding President, Global Harmony Association (GHA) since 2005;
Director, GHA Website "Peace from Harmony": www.peacefromharmony.org
Global Peace Science from Harmony: www.peacefromharmony.org/?cat=en_c&key=585
Peace Science Video: http://youtu.be/hbxY5lREOeA;
NO TO WAR WITH RUSSIA:
http://diy.rootsaction.org/petitions/no-to-war-hot-or-cold-with-russia
----- Original Message -----
From: RJBurrowes & AMcKone, flametree@xxxxxxxxxx
To: leo.semashko@xxxxxxxxx
Sent: 23 мая 2015 г., 9:08:16
Subject: The GPS sixth Chapter in English for your discussion until 30 May
Dear Leo
I have now checked the draft chapter 6 which you kindly circulated for
comment.
I have not read other sections of the chapter, confining my attention to
the section headed 'Nonviolence Principle of GPS. The People's
Nonviolence Charter'.
I presume that you had to abridge the Charter for reasons of space.
Given the link is supplied, I am not particularly troubled by this.
However, I would like to request two small alterations:
1. The correct spelling of Anita's and my names are as follows: Robert
J. Burrowes, Anita McKone. These names are mispelled in both the
contents at the beginning and in the section on the Nonviolence Charter.
2. Would you mind removing your editor's insertion from item 1. please?
That is, remove these words: (as the world military empire with global
dictatorship through about 600 foreign military bases, with birth trauma
of violence which accompanies its history starting with the destruction
of 10 million American Indians - editor’s insertion),
Our aim in the Charter was to state facts, accurately and with minimal
sense of obvious 'politics' about the wording. Your insertion,
unfortunately, does not honour either of these aspects of our aim. For
example, there are over 1000 US military bases around the world and you
have chosen to highlight one thing - important though it is - while
omitting others. And your wording is not of the style used in the
Charter as a whole. This adversely affects the flow of the wording in
the document and seems to simply serve your purpose to criticise the
United States. I am, myself, a staunch critic of the US but I think that
it can be done more effectively by leaving the document intact.
Given that the Charter is a public document available for all to read
and has been signed by many people, it seems very inappropriate to
publish a version that is not a precisely accurate copy of the original.
Do you agree?
I hope that the Russian version was published without this addition but
accept it is too late now.
Anyway, in appreciation of your hard work.
With love and best harmony wishes; Robert
--
Anita McKone and Robert J. Burrowes
Australia
Email: flametree@xxxxxxxxxx
Websites: http://thepeoplesnonviolencecharter.wordpress.com (Charter)
http://tinyurl.com/flametree (Flame Tree Project)
http://tinyurl.com/whyviolence ('Why Violence?')
http://anitamckone.wordpress.com (Songs of Nonviolence)
http://robertjburrowes.wordpress.com
