[projectaon] Re: Comment Period for Lone Wolf 1-7
- From: Jonathan Blake <jonathan@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Sun, 9 Oct 2011 17:40:49 -0700
On Sat, Sep 24, 2011 at 1:55 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> 03tcok
>
> 4: Added "The sword is fashioned from the rib of a Kalkoth and its
> pearlescent blade is as hard as tempered steel. If you wish to take this
> Bone Sword, record it on your Action Chart as Bone Sword +1(K). It will add
> +1 to your COMBAT SKILL when you use it in combat anywhere in Kalte. If this
> weapon is used in any other territory then it loses its +1 bonus and reverts
> to a normal sword."
Interesting, but at most I think we should add this to the footnote.
> 8: Added a new second paragraph: "(You may wish to note the fact that you
> have put on this oil on your Action Chart. However, it does not take the
> space of any item and only affects you for the duration of this adventure)."
> Again, incorrect positioning of period.
Leave it in the footnote.
> 10: Added "You may only examine each liquid once." before "Which one do you
> wish to examine?"
Leave it in the footnote.
> 16: Added "You may choose which Backpack Items to delete. If you have only
> one item in your Backpack, then this single item has been destroyed."
What if you have none? Leave the footnote as-is.
> 18: Added "(Remember to erase this Weapon or weapon-like Special Item from
> your Action Chart.)"
Leave it in the footnote.
> 32: Added "If the earlier fight listed only two Kalkoth (because you crept
> up on the Kalkoth and killed one), ignore Kalkoth 3 in this fight."
Yeah, I'm not sure I like the idea of carrying over damage from a
previous fight. It's unprecedented, and probably hard to actually do
in practice. I think we should remove that part of our footnote.
> 41: Added "(You may still keep the Blue Stone Triangle--you need not erase
> it from your Action Chart.)"
Leave it in the footnote.
> 45: Added to the end of Option 1 "(This Silver Key must be one that you have
> recorded as a Special Item. If you have a silver key that is a Backpack
> Item, it does not qualify here.)"
Leave it in the footnote.
> 55: Change last sentence of second paragraph to "This COMBAT SKILL loss is
> permanent and will affect you for the rest of your life."
I think we should update our footnote with this info.
> 84: Added "(You may record this Special Item as a Blue Stone Triangle which
> you wear around your neck.)"
Leave it in the footnote.
> 88: Deleted " at any time".
We could probably make the same change noting in the errata why it was
a problem and that Mongoose made this change.
> 91: added "Make a note of the fact that you have applied this Baknar Oil.
> It does not take up the space of an item in your Backpack, and its effects
> will only last for as long as you are in Kalte.)"
Leave as-is.
> 132: Added "If you currently posses enough food for 1 Meal, you may now
> consume it in order to avoid this ENDURANCE point deduction."
Leave as-is, possibly noting Mongoose's addendum in the footnote.
> 138: Alter Option 2 to "If you lose any ENDURANCE points during this combat
> (even when attempting to evade), turn immediately to 66."
I like their wording better. Maybe we should change our footnote:
Original: "Even when conducting an extra combat round for evading, you
are still subject to turning to Section 66 if you lose any ENDURANCE."
Suggestion: "Even when evading combat, you must still turn to 66 if
you lose any ENDURANCE."
> 139: Add to the end of Option 1 "(The Laumspur Potion referred to here is a
> special concentrated form of the healing herb. A regular Laumspur Potion
> does not qualify in this instance.)"
Original: "The Laumspur Potion referred to here is specifically
referred to as Red, which indicates a special concentrated Potion. The
regular Laumspur Potion offered in the Equipment section does not
qualify."
Suggestion: "The Laumspur Potion referred to here is specifically
referred to as Red, which indicates a special concentrated Potion. A
regular Laumspur Potion does not qualify."
> 157: Added "Remember to erase this potion from your Action Chart." to the
> end of the first paragraph.
Leave as-is.
> 263: Appended to Option 2 "(Even when conducting an extra combat round for
> evading, you are still subject to turning to Section 66 if you should lose
> any ENDURANCE points.)"
See 138.
> 303: Added "(you must erase the Silver Key you just used from your Action
> Chart)" after "disappears into the lock".
Original: "Remember to erase the Silver Key you just used from your
Action Chart."
Suggestion: "Remember to erase the Silver Key from your Action Chart."
> 308: Change "Helmet" to "Silver Helm" in first sentence. Added/revised "If
> you are already wearing another Helmet, you must discard it if you wish to
> keep this new find. If worn during combat, this magically crafted helmet
> will increase your COMBAT SKILL by 2 points."
I think we should remove the following from our footnote:
"The text is somewhat ambiguous on this matter, but it is likely that
the COMBAT SKILL bonus is magical in nature, and not the result of any
physically protective value it might have (which may very well be
nil)."
Do we have any way to support that idea? If so, we should give some
guidance on what it means that the bonus is magical (e.g. it might be
able to be used in the contest for the Silver Bow).
> 350: Altered "the Daziarn: a portal of total darkness, the door of an
> eternal prison from which there can be no escape" to "a Shadow Gate. It is a
> portal of total darkness, a door to an eternal prison from where none have
> ever returned". Altered "You are the avenger of his crimes, and it is you
> who cast the wretched traitor into the limbo of Daziarn. Your mission is now
> completed. You have survived the caverns of Kalte and freed Sommerlund from
> the menace of Vonotar." to "You are the avenger of his crimes, and by
> ancient rite, you are the one who casts the wretched traitor through the
> Shadow Gate, sending him into the place which lies beyond this dread portal:
> the limbo of the Daziarn Plane."
Original: "Later books will contradict what is said concerning the
Daziarn. The portal Vonotar is thrown into is known as a Shadow Gate,
which in this case, is what leads to the Daziarn Plane, a realm from
which no one has ever returned."
Suggestion: "The portal you throw Vonotar into is known as a Shadow
Gate. This particular Shadow Gate leads to the Daziarn, a realm from
which no one has ever returned."
--
Jon
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