Hi Kirsten, really love the way your poetic structure demonstrates the poem’s
deconstructive subject! Short, clipped phrases! Brilliant! Also the ending
leaves me wanting more, in a good, hungry way. Very satisfying poem. Thank you.
Tru
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On 18 Jan 2019, at 4:08 pm, Emilie Collyer <emiliecollyer@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
This is so joyful Kirsten. I love how much personality it has - that voice
both wry and enthused. The humour :) The generational content is so
fascinating and lovely, what gets handed down, what changes and transforms.
The rituals of eating and preparing food and how this is also linked to
seasons and festivities and family memories.
Particularly love:
Remember Sizzler? God I loved it.
The kids spoon around green jelly.
I’m left sugar wobble on my tongue
I don’t really like marzipan.
But everything tastes better in France.
p.s. it also made me extremely hungry.
Emilie
On Fri, 18 Jan 2019 at 13:08, Kirsten Shan Krauth <kirstenskrauth@xxxxxxxxx>
wrote:
Hello everyone!
Really enjoyed reading the set poems and attempting my own. It started off
being about a waterslide and ended up about this? Weird.
Can’t wait to read all of yours. I feel like a beginner so I’m not sure
about critiquing anyone’s but I can certainly give feedback on what I like!
Cheers
Kirsten
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