Hi Wahibe
I lovethis poem. It’s sensual, thought-provoking and full of wonderful images.
I candefinitely relate to “shade seeking”, “avoids the sun’s kisses”,
“twentydegrees too much” and “skin itches/burns/screams for a good scratch”.
I thoughtthe two images of her back etched with mosquito bites and your skin
with itsscars of a deeper shade, but both like velvet, were skilful and
wonderful.
Would “caught”be better as ‘catches’ or ‘is caught’ on the second line?
Descriptiveand beautifully written.
Maureen
Maureen Sexton
0435024616
maureensexton@xxxxxxxxxxxx
'The haiku has this rather fantasmagorical property: that we always suppose we
ourselves can write such things easily.' Roland Barthes
LIFE IS DRAWING WITHOUT A PENCIL
On Friday, 18 January 2019, 11:50:43 am AWST, Wahibe Moussa
<wtmoussa@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
Hi everyone, this is a first very rough draft. Sorry. The heat’s been painful
for me this week.Andy, I just want to say thanks so much for your provocations.
I found myself obsessing with Summer and Meaning. Especially Summer. I could
probably write an essay on it! Nothing like research to help you avoid your own
writing!
Wahibe Moussa.
Navigating
Words
Action
Direction
☎️
+61 405 604 465
📥
wtmoussa@xxxxxxxxx
yawahiba@xxxxxxxxxx
I ACKNOWLEDGE THE AUSTRALIAN AND ABORIGINAL AND TORRES STRAIT ISLANDERS AS THE
FIRST INHABITANTS OF AUSTRALIA AND ACKNOWLEDGE THE TRADITIONAL CUSTODIANS OF
THE LAND WHERE I LIVE, WORK AND LEARN.
| | Virus-free. www.avg.com |
