[folks] Re: FOLKS brochures

  • From: <shermes2@xxxxxxxxxx>
  • To: folks@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
  • Date: Sun, 24 Jul 2011 10:08:22 -0500

We have a couple of suggestions. 

Page 1  Our Mission

Change ..."enlightening our community of what our library has to offer."

To     ..."enlightening our community about what our library has to offer."

Rationale:   "enlightening... of" isn't common usage as a combination


Page 2   Why does our library need FOLKS like us?  1st sentence

Change ..."Little Chute, however,"...

To     ..."Little Chute. However,"...

Rationale  However is too strong of an interjection for mid- sentence.

The brochures look really good!!!

Kathy and Steve



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