[projectaon] Re: book 27 issues
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Tue, 05 Jan 2010 11:04:22 +0000
Hi LeRoy
On 01/01/2010 04:38, McSwain LeRoy wrote:
happy new year and here is the list i compiled while enjoying 'vampirium'.
Cheers for this. Took me a few days to work through it...Here's how it has
panned out so far:
FIXED (NOT ERRATA):
(ne) The Story So Far: chosen his time wall -> chosen his time well
(ne) The Story So Far: For the greater glow of Sommerlund and the Kai -> ? For the greater glory of
Sommerlund and the Kai
(ne) The Game Rules: If you have successfully completed either of the previous adventures in the
Lone Wolf New Order series (Books 21-22) -> If you have successfully completed previous adventures
in the Lone Wolf New Order series (Books 21-26)
(ne) 3: of discovery the darkness -> of discovery; the darkness
(ne) 21: ridged -> ridge,
(ne) 53: If you possess neither of these skills, or if you them, turn instead to choose not to use
164. [lm: this sounds cool as is ;) but the link is broken]
(ne) 54: is obscured be -> is obscured by
(er) 63: it is a terrifying -> it is the terrifying
(ne) 65: leaps your fingertip -> leaps from your fingertip
(ne) 70: fangled head -> fanged head [lm: cf.refs.161&210]
(ne) 70: Breaching a sigh -> Breathing a sigh
(ne) 76: You courageous act -> Your courageous act
(ne) 80: talisman that engraved -> talisman that is engraved
(ne) 96: net of thousand wrinkles -> net of a thousand wrinkles
(ne) 109: muscular backs, they possess four -> muscular backs. They
possess four
(ne) 111: Paralysed be -> Paralysed by
(ne) 160: pain of downing -> pain of drowning
(ne) 211: startled be -> startled by
(ne) 216: deflected be -> deflected by
(ne) 227: a box of provision -> ? a box of provisions
(ne) 239, 271: you possess a Bow, and wishes -> you possess a Bow, and
wish
(ne) 245: spawned be -> spawned by
(ne) 256: closed shop dollars -> ? closed shop doorways
(ne) 273: blocked be -> blocked by
(ne) 281: the sorcerers woman -> the sorcerous woman
(ne) Errata [243]: Removed paragraph break between ‘Random Number Table.’ with ‘If you possess’. ->
(243) Removed paragraph break between ‘Random Number Table.’ and ‘If you possess’.
FIXED (ERRATA):
(er) 3: the shine has -> the shrine has
(er) 11, 298: soldier's mess hall -> soldiers' mess hall
(er) 57: loud peeling -> loud pealing
(er) 69, 92: If your total score is now is 4 or lower [lm: one 'is' is
redundant.]
(er) 88: shield -> <i>Shield</i> [lm: as in ref.185]
(er) 116: take hold the blanket roll -> take hold of the blanket roll
[lm: cf.158]
(er) 230: If you possess the Kai Weapon ‘Magnara’ [lm: you can't get here with magnara] [so: Well
spotted! Deleted this sentence.]
(er) 342: in the middle track -> in the middle of the track
(er) 344: and rolls away -> and he rolls away [lm: the burning bit of wood is still on the claw for
you to jab it at the autarch again]
(er) 345: you whisper, ‘I will -> you whisper. ‘I will
ESCALATED:
(er) The Story So Far: First Order of the Kai were -> ? First Order of
the Kai was
(er) The Story So Far: Autarch's squad were returning -> ? Autarch's
squad was returning
(er) Equipment: magical axe, sword, or broadsword -> ? magical Axe,
Sword, or Broadsword
(er) Equipment: (Bows and Arrows) weapon -> ? Weapon
(er) Improved Disciplines: (sun lord -- grandweaponmastery) weapon ->
Weapon (x3)
(er) Improved Disciplines: (sun lord -- grandweaponmastery) quarterstaff
-> Quarterstaff
(er) Improved Disciplines: (sun lord -- telegnosis) Time duration and degree of surface difficulty
increases -> Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increase
(er) 1: crew attend -> crew attends
(er) 1: panoply of rolling hills and grasslands pass -> panoply of
rolling hills and grasslands passes
(er) 3: a troop of Bhanarians come -> a troop of Bhanarians comes
(er) 20: after arriving here -> after you arrive here
(er/ft) 45, 83: he will accept 1 Weapon, 3 Gold Crowns, and 1 Backpack Item [lm: what if, for
example, you aren't carrying a weapon?]
(er) 72: You must now erase from your list of Backpack Items the Claw of Naar -> You must now erase
from your Action Chart the Claw of Naar (claw of naar is a special item.)
(er) 80: weapons -> Weapons
(er) 94: including -> ? as well as
(er) 109 (Illustration 7 [Caption]): a group of creatures speed -> a
group of creatures speeds
(er) 112: group are -> group is
(er) 112: this élite unit of bodyguards have -> this élite unit of
bodyguards has
(er/ft) 131: You must now erase half of all the Arrows you carry, rounding the figure up to the
nearest whole number where appropriate. [lm: are you to round up the half that you subtract or the
total number of arrows that you carry?]
(er) 155, 341: and you are forced to head south in search of firmer terrain -> ? and you are forced
to head north in search of firmer terrain (south would be towards the sea)
(er) 159: per rider, that's 20 -> per rider; that's 20
(er) 186: have found who -> have found whom
(er) 199: the creature's head -> the leading creature's head [lm: the specific target has not yet
been stated]
(er) 219: forward -> ? forwards
(er) 225: ask a favour?’ Rimoah nods -> ? ask a favour?’ (paragraph break) Rimoah nods [lm] [so: Or,
merge the paragraph ending "Rimoah nods his reply." with the subsequent paragraph.]
(er) 240: squad have recovered -> squad has recovered
(er) 253: All four of your Arrows find their mark -> ? All four of your
Arrows find their marks
(er) 273: gust of ale-soaked air and the jingle of bells interrupts -> gust of ale-soaked air and
the jingle of bells interrupt
(er) 287: and then turn him -> and then turn them
(er) 294: weapons -> Weapons
(er) 294: troop of crossbowmen arrive and form -> troop of crossbowmen
arrives and forms
(er) 302: horde of winged creatures circle and dive -> horde of winged
creatures circles and dives
(er) 302: the squad of Imperial Guards catch sight -> the squad of
Imperial Guards catches sight
(er) 304: with the other -> with the others
(er) 304: weapon -> Weapon
(er) 306: the patrol are -> the patrol is
(er) 318: If you have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord, turn to 49. [lm: this assumes that you have
grand huntmastery, but it is possible to arrive here using grand pathsmanship instead]
(er) 325: axe -> Axe
(er) 326: a handful of the Bhanarians leave the fight at the archway and come -> a handful of the
Bhanarians leaves the fight at the archway and comes
(er) 334: enemy squad are -> enemy squad is [cf.318]
(er) 330: the onrushing creature -> the leader of the onrushing creatures
(er) 338: speed of his movements increase -> speed of his movements
increases
(ne) Improved Disciplines: windows, etc., to shatter -> windows, etc. to
shatter [See Book 25 Errata]
(ne) Improved Disciplines: (sun knight -- grandweaponmastery) weapon ->
Weapon [See Book 26 Errata]
REJECTED:
(er) 349: awhile -> ? a while [lm] [so: No, this usage is correct.]
Updated test version available here:
<http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/27v/title.htm>
Only one more book to go in the Lone Wolf series, LeRoy...You may need to turn your attention to the
Freeway Warrior series after "The Hunger of Sejanoz"! ;-)
--
Simon Osborne
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