(the "[sic]"s need taking out if we use that wording, obviously, I was just pointing out that the first torch doesn't need capitalised cos it doesn't go on the Action Chart) -- http://www.feline1.co.uk On Tue 12/04/11 1:36 PM , Simon Osborne outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx sent: Hi With a couple of very minor tweaks, this is perfect; certainly better than my attempts! If there are any dissenting (or agreeing) voices, please submit feedback regarding these proposals. -- Simon Osborne Project Aon On 12/04/2011 11:50, David Davis wrote: > My suggestion re 04tcod-123: > > "At the entrance, you find a discarded wooden crate, containing six > Torches and a Tinderbox. The mines are dark and you will need to use at > least one Torch to light your way. You can take as many as you wish but > remember each Torch counts as one Backpack Item, so be sure to make the > appropriate changes to your Action Chart." > > > "At the entrance, you find a discarded wooden crate, containing six > Torches and a Tinderbox. The mines are dark and you will need to use at > least one torch [sic] to light your way. You can take as many additional > Torches as you wish but remember each one counts as Backpack Item, so be > sure to make the appropriate changes to your Action Chart." > > with the footnote: "You are assumed to carry at least one lit torch > [sic] into the mine here; this is carried in the hand and there is no > need to record it on your Action Chart. For the sake of continuity with > subsequent sections, you are also assumed to take the Tinderbox; this > counts as a Backpack Item, and we suggest you discard one item in its > favour if your Backpack is full. If you already possess an alternative > means of illumination (e.g. a Kalte Firesphere) then there is no need to > take the Tinderbox." > > Benefits of this combination of slight emendation of original text plus > footnote: > - Scenario 1: you already have a Kalte Firesphere - you don't have to do > anything to your action chart. Hurrah! > - Scenario 2: you have no Firesphere; you just light & carry one torch: > you just need to note the Tinderbox on your backpack items too. > - Scenario 3: you are a greedy hoarder who takes lots of Torches - well > you record them on your Action Chart as per the original text. ~~~~~~ Manage your subscription at