[projectaon] Editor's Companion Submission

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   From: Keith Sheldon <Relenoir@xxxxxxxx>
   Date: 04:04:11 on Wednesday, July 28, 2004
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(er) 16tlov 20: Vashna's Dagger -> Vashna's dagger [KS: Unless the abbreviation 
of the Dagger of Vashna receives caps because it's a special item.]
(er) 16tlov 19: a sudden massive bolt -> a sudden, massive bolt
(er) 16tlov 19: energy which buckles -> energy that buckles
(er) 16tlov 19: erect a psi-screen to protect -> erect a Psi-screen to protect
(er) 16tlov 16: 'not less you be -> 'not 'less you be [KS: My guess here is 
that "less" is a contraction for "unless", therefore using the same apostrophe 
to fill in missing letters as her dialect in the rest of the sentence would 
indicate.]
(er) 16tlov 16: At length you come -> At length, you come
(er) 16tlov 15: strong will and you -> strong will, and you
(er) 16tlov 14: two rounds, by turning -> two rounds by turning
(er) 16tlov 12: morning sun and the  -> morning sun, and the
(er) 16tlov 11: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning
(er) 16tlov 11: Sun Knight, or higher, -> Sun Knight or higher,
(er) 16tlov 11: skull and, as the -> skull, and as the
(er) 16tlov 11: weakened state and this -> weakened state, and this
(er) 16tlov 11: live horse-meat -> live horsemeat [KS: May have been hyphenated 
in the original due to being at the end of a line.]
(er) 16tlov numbered: their most-favoured food -> their most favoured food  
[KS: Or perhaps "their favorite food"?]
(er) 16tlov 9: panther you leap -> panther, you leap
(er) 16tlov 9: appear but the  -> appear, but the
(er) 16tlov 9: in hand you climb -> in hand, you climb
(er) 16tlov 8: boat which is -> boat, which is
(er) 16tlov 8: first-floor ruins of -> first floor ruins of 
(er) 16tlov 6: upper tier and -> upper tier, and
(er) 16tlov 3: Knight, or higher, turn to 31. -> Knight or higher, turn to 31.
(er) 16tlov 2: of animal kinship.  -> of Animal Kinship. [KS: The Kai 
Disciplines were always capitalized in books 1-5.]
(er) 16tlov 2: the first-floor window -> the first floor window
(er) 16tlov 1: skyship Skyrider. -> skyship, Skyrider.

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