[projectaon] Editor's Companion Submission

The following was sent from the Project Aon contact form
   From: Keith Sheldon <Relenoir@xxxxxxxx>
   Date: 18:51:21 on Tuesday, July 27, 2004
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(ne) 16tlov kaiwisdm: the completion Of this  -> the completion of this
(er) 16tlov imprvdsc: eg: water -> e.g. water
(er) 16tlov imprvdsc: kinds of surface, -> kinds of surfaces,
(er) 16tlov imprvdsc: body-weight -> body weight
(er) 16tlov imprvdsc: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast [KS: Everything else that is 
hyphenated is lower-case for the second word.  Should this follow suit?]
(ne) 16tlov imprvdsc: Grand Mastery you will -> Grand Mastery, you will [KS: 
This is the original script, but the PA version may be correct.  It seemed 
right with a comma to me.]
(er) 16tlov cmbtrulz: reducing his ENDURANCE points -> reducing its ENDURANCE 
points [KS: Encompasses female opponents as well as creatures of unknown 
gender.]
(er) 16tlov equipmnt: jb: update for this book and add to errata These are 
always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. The 
currency of Nyras is the Kika. The exchange rate is 10 Kika for 1 Gold Crown. 
-> The currency of Magador is the Gold Crown.  These are always carried in the 
Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. [KS: Omitted from the 
original book.]
(er) 16tlov equipmnt: it adds 3 points to your -> it adds 5 points to your [KS: 
This has already been corrected in the PA version.]
(ne) 16tlov equipmnt: Wolf adventures. (Books 1-14), -> Wolf adventures (Books 
1-15),  [KS: Two errors: eliminate period between adventures and ( and change 
14 to 15.]
(er) 16tlov equipmnt: Magador you take -> Magador, you take
(ne) 16tlov discplnz: If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, 
the first of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series jb: check all books for this, 
you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action 
Chart in Book 16. -> If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, 
the fourth of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series, you may add a further Grand 
Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 17.
(??) 16tlov discplnz: Grand Defender, with which you -> Grand Defender, at 
which you [KS: "With" makes the rank sound like a possession, "at" might not be 
the best answer, but sounds more appropriate.]
(er) 16tlov discplnz: hearing, smell and night vision. -> hearing, smell, and 
night vision [KS: Comma for last item in a list before "and"?]
(er) 16tlov tssf: mystery quickly and so you -> mystery quickly, and so you
(er) 16tlov tssf: vigilant for he fears -> vigilant, for he fears
(er) 16tlov tssf: Dark God and rarely -> Dark God, and rarely
(er) 16tlov tssf: hellish strongholds fierce fighting -> hellish strongholds, 
fierce fighting
(er) 16tlov tssf: practitioners of Right-Handed Magic -> practitioners of 
Right-handed magic [KS: Left-handed and Old Kingdom above have a lower-case 
"magic, and "Handed" should be lower-case.]
(er) 16tlov tssf: their new-found responsibilities -> their newfound 
responsibilities [KS: This has already been fixed in the Project Aon version.]
(er) 16tlov tssf: that no Kai lord -> that no Kai Lord
(ne) 16tlov tssf: its forrner glory -> its former glory

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