The following was sent from the Project Aon contact form From: Keith Sheldon <Relenoir@xxxxxxxx> Date: 18:50:16 on Tuesday, July 27, 2004 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ (ne) 16tlov kaiwisdm: the completion Of this -> the completion of this (er) 16tlov imprvdsc: eg: water -> e.g. water (er) 16tlov imprvdsc: kinds of surface, -> kinds of surfaces, (er) 16tlov imprvdsc: body-weight -> body weight (er) 16tlov imprvdsc: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast [KS: Everything else that is hyphenated is lower-case for the second word. Should this follow suit?] (ne) 16tlov imprvdsc: Grand Mastery you will -> Grand Mastery, you will [KS: This is the original script, but the PA version may be correct. It seemed right with a comma to me.] (er) 16tlov cmbtrulz: reducing his ENDURANCE points -> reducing its ENDURANCE points [KS: Encompasses female opponents as well as creatures of unknown gender.] (er) 16tlov equipmnt: jb: update for this book and add to errata These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. The currency of Nyras is the Kika. The exchange rate is 10 Kika for 1 Gold Crown. -> The currency of Magador is the Gold Crown. These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. [KS: Omitted from the original book.] (er) 16tlov equipmnt: it adds 3 points to your -> it adds 5 points to your [KS: This has already been corrected in the PA version.] (ne) 16tlov equipmnt: Wolf adventures. (Books 1-14), -> Wolf adventures (Books 1-15), [KS: Two errors: eliminate period between adventures and ( and change 14 to 15.] (er) 16tlov equipmnt: Magador you take -> Magador, you take (ne) 16tlov discplnz: If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, the first of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series jb: check all books for this, you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 16. -> If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, the fourth of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series, you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 17. (??) 16tlov discplnz: Grand Defender, with which you -> Grand Defender, at which you [KS: "With" makes the rank sound like a possession, "at" might not be the best answer, but sounds more appropriate.] (er) 16tlov discplnz: hearing, smell and night vision. -> hearing, smell, and night vision [KS: Comma for last item in a list before "and"?] (er) 16tlov tssf: mystery quickly and so you -> mystery quickly, and so you (er) 16tlov tssf: vigilant for he fears -> vigilant, for he fears (er) 16tlov tssf: Dark God and rarely -> Dark God, and rarely (er) 16tlov tssf: hellish strongholds fierce fighting -> hellish strongholds, fierce fighting (er) 16tlov tssf: practitioners of Right-Handed Magic -> practitioners of Right-handed magic [KS: Left-handed and Old Kingdom above have a lower-case "magic, and "Handed" should be lower-case.] (er) 16tlov tssf: their new-found responsibilities -> their newfound responsibilities [KS: This has already been fixed in the Project Aon version.] (er) 16tlov tssf: that no Kai lord -> that no Kai Lord (ne) 16tlov tssf: its forrner glory -> its former glory ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~