[projectaon] Re: Comment Period for Lone Wolf 1-7

On 10/11/2011 04:37, Jonathan Blake wrote:
On Sun, Sep 25, 2011 at 7:49 AM, Simon Osborne<outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>  wrote:
13tplor

[2] (Grand Master Disciplines) Section now reads "This Discipline enables a
Grand Master to become supremely efficient in the use of all weapons. When
you enter combat with one of your Grand Master weapons, you add 5 points to
your COMBAT SKILL. The rank of Kai Grand Defender, with which you begin the
Grand Master [sic--should be itals] series, means you are supremely
efficient in the use of two of the weapons listed below. For each book that
you complete in the Grand Master [sic--should be itals] series (13-20), you
will gain mastery of an additional weapon. For example, if you complete 'The
Plague Lords of Ruel' [sic--shouldn't have quotes, should be itals] and have
the Grand Master Discipline of Grand Weaponmastery at the beginning of the
next Grand Master [sic--should be itals] book, you can choose an additional
Weapon and add it to your list of those with which you are supremely
efficient." [sic--lacks the list, which is erroneously printed beneath
"Weaponmastery" in "Kai and Magnakai Disciplines"]

Revise the text with our footnote, but change the last sentence:

"For each book that you complete of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series
(13–20), you will gain mastery of an additional Weapon. For example,
if you complete The Plague Lords of Ruel and have the Grand Master
Discipline of Grand Weaponmastery at the beginning of the next book,
you may choose an additional Weapon to gain mastery of."

...remembering to <cite> the appropriate phrases, of course: "Lone Wolf Grand Master" and "The Plague Lords of Ruel". ;-)

[8] (Section 91) Added "(whether or not you have Kai-surge)"

How about we swap the last two sentences and make the Kai-surge the
"further" bonus?

"If your current ENDURANCE points score is 20 or higher, add 2 to your
score. If you possess Grand Mastery of Kai-surge, add a further 3 to
the number you have chosen."

I like your idea, Jon; it flows more logically than the Mongoose fix.

[17] (Section 234) Added "Each jar contains all of a given herb or potion
(e.g. the jar of Laumspur contains all five doses of Laumspur). The Ceners
have created concentrated potions which take up less space than is usual."
[23] (Section 341) Added "Each jar contains all of a given herb or potion
(e.g. the jar of Laumspur contains all five doses of Laumspur). The Ceners
have created concentrated potions which take up less space than is usual."

How about this?

"Each jar contains all of a given herb or potion in a concentrated
form created by the Cener Druids (e.g. all five doses of Laumspur are
contained in a single jar). Each jar counts as one Backpack Item."

Yeah, I reckon that's an improvement--a simpler, more straightforward explanation of what is going on with the jars.

--
Simon Osborne
Project Aon

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