[bksvol-discuss] Re: Image Descriptions in Children's Books

  • From: "Estelnalissi" <airadil@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
  • To: <bksvol-discuss@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
  • Date: Fri, 6 Aug 2010 14:48:01 -0400

Dear Scott and Booksharian Friends,

Regarding the thread on picture description.

Though my low vision precludes me from describing the pictures in some books, I am able to interpret pictures in others well enough to write descriptions. Naturally I'm composing these descriptions myself in books I proofread. I do my best to edit my original descriptions, but like most writers of original material, I tend to overlook some of my own errors and would benefit greatly from having Booksharians proof and edit my original text.

The Lottie Project is the book for middle school aged children I'm currently describing. I would give anything for someone to volunteer to go over my descriptions to catch grammatical errors I make, and to point out descriptions which are unclear, etc. This is a function blind readers with good writing skills would be particularly equipped to perform. They would be in a position to advise me if my descriptions clarify or confuse.

Describing pictures is a slow process for me. First, It is painstaking for me to visually study a picture and identify details not already described in the text that I can describe. Then I write and rewrite the description trying to be clear and not too wordy. Then I reread the text making sure nothing in my description contradicts it. Of course I spell check. Last, when I've finished proofing the book, I go over the descriptions once more to catch any mistakes I missed on the first go-round.

As examples, Here are some descriptions I wrote this afternoon. I haven't gone over them with a fine tooth comb so you can see the raw material they are. I call them drawings instead of illustrations or pictures because they are meant by the author to be drawings of the main character she makes as she tells her story in first person. In children's For most children's books I write picture, for adults I write illustration and when appropriate I write photograph, graph, chart, map, etc. I'm in the second half of the book. All characters whose names I use have been introduced early on and the reader is very familiar with them. I don't name individuals until the author does so.

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[Drawing of Lottie with Angela on her left and Lisa on her right. Lottie is the only one frowning. She's the tallest and is wearing a flowered top, a jacket, knee socks and a short, straight skirt. Angela is black, is wearing jeans, a T-shirt and short jacket. Her hands are in her jeans pockets. Lisa, the shortest girl has short, straight, blonde hair that curls up at the ends. Her skirt is short, straight and dotted with flowers. over her dark T-shirt she has on a long open jacket. Her hands are in her jacket pockets. She's wearing nylons.]



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[Drawing of Charlie and Jo frowning as they stand at the table. Jo is clutching her wrist. The bowl of eggs is on the table with the masher beside it.]

[Drawing of everyone in the car. Mark is driving and Jo is looking at him. In the back seat, Charlie is frowning and Robin is holding Birdie.]

In this case there were two drawing on one page

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[Drawing of everyone in a rectangle shaped car on the ride. It has a top with zig-zag trim. The side is decorated with a pattern of a flower, a leaf, a flower, a leaf, etc. in a straight row. Below the car are the treetops. Charlie is frowning, holding her head. The adults look worried. Robin is clutching the side of the cart. He's just tall enough to look over the side. His mouth is wide open. The jagged edged word bubble over Robin's head says, AAAAAH!.]

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[Drawing of robin sitting in a car with a smiling face on the front. He is holding on tight and his face looks frozen in worry. His mouth is a short, straight line.]



Often our sighted and partially sighted volunteers scan books and add the descriptions which are then corrected when necessary by proofers.



I am a proofer so currently nobody sees my descriptions until they are in the collection when it's too late to fix them.



Are there any thoughts from volunteers or staff on this?



I'm willing to continue working as I am. It's just that I worry that I may be overlooking mistakes in my own writing, or confusing readers with some of my descriptions.



Always with love,



Lissi

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