atw: Re: In-house disclaimer

Hi Allan,

Look at the disclaimer at the close of the credits of most
modern English language or US ;-) movies for some better
wording.

Replace "that show" with either "that contain" or simply
with "with". (Clumsy, plus it is the displaying application
that shows or displays, whereas the illustration is what
contains.)

I'd replace "accidental" with unintended or unintentional.

Something cannot be accidental if you created it
deliberately (the result is what was unintended).

Once you have unintended, you need not express any regret.

Surely "ficticious" should be "fictitious".  (Spell check?)

How about people instead of persons (Argh!) although, if
they are fictitious, they are neither.  Rather they are
"characters".

"Implied reference" is redundant.  It is just a reference.

HTH.

Michael

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E&OE.Quoting Allan Charlton <Allan.Charlton@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>:

> Folks
> Some documents in this project will include screen shots that show
> names, addresses and phone numbers.  I have removed the information
> about known real people by faking shots and bit editing where necessary,
> but I want to add a bit of protection by adding a notice in the front
> matter.
>  
> This is what my notice says:
> This document contains illustrations that show names, addresses, phone
> numbers and other identifying information about ficticious persons
> invented for the purposes of illustration.  Any reference or implied
> reference to any real person, living or dead, is accidental and
> regretted.
>  
> Does anyone have any experience in this kind of disclaimer?
> Do you have any suggestions for a better wording?
>  
> Thanks
> Allan
>  
> 
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